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At 1/20/14 08:05 PM, ChickenTenders wrote:

I've tried to make a thread before and I was attacked by some kid calling me useless and stuff.

LOL I remember that thread

That's where you lost me

*A little dark headed girl appoarches him, and he turns around. deactivating his dark energy.*

What are entry's one and two

this is a very detailed dream if it is real

the creative idea in this story is original and I liked it

the story could use a few re-writes in order to fix words that are too plain

this story does make one apprehensive to start a dream journal

Lastly if I were being held captive by ( my worst nightmare ) and I were aware that I am asleep
I would also realize its my mind creating the world around me
in a world of your own making you are a god
the darkness can be fought as long as there is light
that like in the dark tunnel
that light is your power and the darkness uses everything to hinder you reaching it
images of friends and family telling you that its no use
physical pain to bring you to your knees
this character must reach that light
or the darkness will one day consume him
and waking life will be the real nightmare

(These people, I've done so much for them but I feel as if there is still so much more I can still do and I cant wait) (The crowds are filled with hundreds of faces, these people count on me the weight is heavy yet with so much support from them I feel that I can give them the world they want)
(My wife looks so beautiful in pink I am luck enough to have her by my side)
(Everyone wants to shake my hand but i have to get in that car)
(A bright and blue sky what a wonderful day for a ride in a convertible)
(A light wind in my face and more happy faces cheering as we pass by)
(My wife knows to wave and smile at the crowds and why wouldn't she they love her just as much)
(There is a tunnel up ahead I think I'll give my wife a smooch)
(Something is wrong!! My throat is burning i cant call out for help)
(my wife has noticed, she is asking me what's the matter but its no use i can not speak)
(I can only gesture with my hands when she see's the wound it too late)
( Only for a second I felt a short pain in my head)
(that was the end my consciousness had stopped)

I say being a man is being a gentleman and a good father.
Every day I am quick to listen and slow to anger
I treat others the way I want to be treated
I take care of my son as I watch him grow
I tell my wife that I love her every day

To more directly respond
there is nothing wrong in that department
but some day in the not so near future
I will be to old for sex
however I will still have the love of my wife and a son who can always count on me

That's what makes a man
not your dick or your lack of ability to use it at an old age

on the creative scale in my opinion this is an epic
there were so many bits in there that I didn't see coming
it was a roller coaster ride with highs and lows, turns and flips
laughs and sneers
over all very well done indeed

At 12/6/13 01:57 AM, Entice wrote:

At 12/6/13 01:55 AM, Maltos wrote: Feet fail me not

Is that feedback?

Constructive criticism plz

sorry I was just thinking about running up a nippled mountain
(feet fail me not)
wanna get to the top!!
I did enjoy the poem and then the mothers breath thing, very clever indeed

The great thing about tom is he listens to what we want

At 12/5/13 01:20 AM, Entice wrote: I dream of a nippled mountain and scale its face
I reach the summit and realize it's my mother's breath
I fall down that nippled mountain into the milky ether of years past
See my reflection in the mirror, and realize there's nothing left

Feet fail me not

Newgrounds underground movies

BOSS

GTA SA was great for its time but looking back it was ass

At 11/19/13 03:49 PM, King-Duckford wrote: Nah, Newgrounds has been pretty much dead for years, simply aspirating, giving the illusion of life.

Newgrounds dead?
I didn't see anyone shoot newgrounds

Censorship is another word for control
control of information and what not
Murder isn't something anyone wants to see
nor is it something to be turned into a joke
People grieve in different ways
some laugh, some cry
Why ignore human nature?
Why not let people choose
People don't have to click the link
If they click it then its their choosing
If a parent buys their ten year old grand theft auto five
it is the fault of the parent for doing so
A game will hurt no one
Censorship stifles everyone

What is magic? If in this world E=Mc2 then I would assume that magic is a form of matter, an energy source that I could harness but what is the soul? If the soul too is made of matter on the atomic scale then how might I turn matter into energy? That's just me I ask to many questions I want to know everything. Mostly I want to know the details that are behind what I see, I ultimately want to understand why.

Raise the dead why ever would you do such a thing?
( The dead do not hear nor do they see it is life they need.)
Need? The dead do not need
( I beg to differ for their soul may still linger after proclaimed dead.)
Even so their soul is destined for the afterlife.
( My Lord, the afterlife could very well not exist at all.)
Blasphemer! You dare question the faith held so dearly for over five thousand years!
( I do not question your faith, I do however question your lack of judgment )
Steady your tongue necromancer. You are a dying breed and I will be damned before you start raising corpses in my kingdom!
( A moral king indeed such a sweet and tender soul ah yes I can smell it from here )
ENOUGH! I shall have your head necromancer, guards take him away!
*as the guards drag him away*
( My Lord you may have my head but I will have your soul )

Sorry I know its not my story but you know just an idea of where you could go with it
The last necromancer is he good or evil? Does he really want to bring life back to cold bodies or is he only interested in strengthening
his magic to gain a powerful soul. Is his soul corrupted by the stench of day old dirt?

Anyway I'll stop there good luck on the story

At 11/17/13 11:16 PM, BoobMarley wrote:

At 11/17/13 09:16 PM, Maltos wrote: thanks for reading

I stopped reading at the title, son.

Well thank you for your helpful feedback

At 11/17/13 05:02 PM, BoobMarley wrote: Skeptic.

Thank you for catching that I kick myself when I make such stupid mistakes

thanks for reading

Congratulations! You have successfully creeped me out. I can't tell if that is a title or not. It's a pretty, well, scary piece. I would say you have accomplished your objective with your writing.

It seems like this is a poem of some sort, though the organization is weird. There's no real consistency, no format. And honestly this line seemed chunk; "I beg for a change..." But great job, you have a nice talent for writing. That last three lines were amazing and really took the poem to the next level, using to mood established in the earlier lines to tell a bit of a story. Keep it up!

Hey thanks for reading and for the reply
If you liked this one I'll be sure to brush up on my format and I'll get something else up maybe on a lighter note
thanks again for reading!!

Everything You Are About To Read Is Fictitious
As Far As You Know

My name is Thomas H****** I've tried time and time again but I never know why.
Why I can't stop, Why I push myself, Why I stain my lungs with fresh air.
I beg for a change and still I've seen the same old I cant stand it
I don't recommend you make a peep, close your mouth as well as your eyes
keep that rope around your neck keep it tight
Stop wasting time you'll shit yourself when you die
Pull the lever say goodbye
( Don't tell them the end ) but why? ( It's The Best Part ) I don't want this to be the end ( It's To Late Your Already Out Of Breath )

At 11/6/13 12:25 AM, elreybon wrote: Thanks!

I'm fairly new to NG but I love to write.

If you like my writing style I have some other stuff you can look at:
I have a short script that's a spoof of those cryptozoological shows:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1352970
Here is a short poem:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1352711
My entry into the halloween writing contest:
http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1351719#bbspost24849157_post_text
As well as a couple of short poems in my news posts:
http://elreybon.newgrounds.com/news/

Lyrics are what I am all about and Fade (a poem) but add a tune and you've got a song. I did like Fade, as for the driving poem it is something that we can all relate to however not my cup of tea. I couldn't get the spoof up though I did get the Halloween sub and I read it expecting to see a subtle hint of head games and I saw a little bit of that, it did feel a bit rushed like I didn't know enough about the phantom. Would have been cool if when he awoke he found himself in one of those ( I'm going to get chopped up and possible eaten) sort of situations. All in all not bad, I hope to read more from you

At 10/27/13 03:44 PM, elreybon wrote: Hi,

I'm new to Newgrounds and am trying to be a productive part of the community. I have been reading and offering critiques in the writing forums and hope I have been helpful. But, I realized that offering critiques without offering up any of my own writing for critical review is somewhat hypocritical so I am changing that right now. Below is a short story I have written, please read and critique. (Oh and I hope you enjoy it as well).

Honestly when I started reading I thought here we go another bad chunk of crap that im about to endure one that I would say afterwards I'll never get those 3 min back. It was when I continued and it said I exist, I was hooked. I love stories that play tricks with your mind and this was one of them. A good story is one that your average reader can understand the authors meaning behind every word and its good to see talented writers so I'll say to you Well done

At 1/27/13 02:23 PM, KiwiSundae wrote: Here ya go: http://www.wattpad.com/11162134-my-one-true-wish

just came across this I may be behind on the updates but he lives in florida with his friends but he is in high school? where are his parents I mean he is only 16 and his home room teacher from school helps him get a sex change? Like I said I may be behind but it all seems a bit strange

At 10/30/13 03:16 PM, DingoWalleyStudio wrote: I've been writing and creating music for a 7 song Indie Psych album. The problem is, I am no good at making lyrics. So, is anyone here a Lyricist?

If you are, give me a PM and I'll send you some "Vocal Tracks" that you can write Lyrics too. You will be credited on the Album and all of the songs, but you will not receive pay (Unless told otherwise).

I've been writing lyrics for eight years and I am very good at my craft. that being said I don't give lyrics for free

At 4/10/13 02:30 AM, hornfluffy wrote: Im making a jungle adventure platforming game that's faced paced and has lots of action! Lost temples, mercenaries, cannibals, wild animals, mutant creatures and treasure! You must fight your way through this harsh environment to survive. I have the game-play down but I don't have a good plot or story or characters to help move the game along. If anybodies interested PM me or Email me at tylerpowell09@yahoo.com

Maybe the mercenaries are searching for a band of terrorists that are using chemical warfare and its mutating everything that inhabits the jungle until the mercenaries find refuge in a temple but in the temple are an ancient people who have survived by living off the land but they've mutated due to the terrorist's actions. The mercenaries are now trapped in the temple with ancient cannibals but of course there is some sort of treasure in there but at what risk in order to get it? Hinder themselves or who ever is left, by taking the treasure (whatever it is) or realizing the treasure is getting out with their lives.

At 6/18/13 12:38 AM, Hikky-Dikky wrote:

At 6/18/13 12:32 AM, Maltos wrote:

At 6/18/13 12:20 AM, Hikky-Dikky wrote:

At 6/16/13 05:13 PM, Satan wrote: No, fuck off.

Such a friendly community, this is!

No one wants to take a survey

But he didn't have to be a huge dick about it.

true

At 6/18/13 01:10 AM, Viper50 wrote: You can't do anything with medal points. They are technically worthless.

thats good to know thank you

Where it shows your medals and your points.....my question is what are the points for? is it just a state or can I do something with them

At 6/18/13 12:20 AM, Hikky-Dikky wrote:

At 6/16/13 05:13 PM, Satan wrote: No, fuck off.

Such a friendly community, this is!

No one wants to take a survey

Soooo catchy

Anyone who needs help with a flash script I'd be happy to help just send me a message on NG and ill get back to you

Thanx

As the story goes, there was a god by the name of Flup the god of what's new and it was he who knew what the world needed. His iconic tank that came rolling across the screen of every T.V in America was breathtaking. Along with a fellow god, the god of the grounds Pico. They met under an orange sky where great white whales soared in the air. One day an evil known only by space book reared it's ugly head and challenged Flup that it would create the greatest community in the history of man kind. The god Flup was quick as was the god of the grounds, Flup retold the story of Pico's first adventure and with it an online community greater than the world had ever seen. It was as if Flup had defeated space book all together, Flup had games, forums, movies, music, chat and submitted user content. Myspace was soon created and the masses followed all but a few stayed In the land created by Flup and the god of the grounds. It wasn't long until Myspace crumbled and fell into the darkness known as the forgotten past but Flup's world remained strong. Flup's world only flourished as time went on but Flup began having regrets that people had forgotten Newgrounds. When another evil greater than the last arose from the mind of a lawyer. This lawyer was the god of lies and lust, it was then that Flup asked the god of the grounds what should be done. Pico saw the grounds and looked over facebook and Pico saw its great evil as well as the propaganda of the lower case f and it sickened him to see that symbol on the back of every milk carton. Pico was felt grim as he returned to Flup and told Flup " Facebook may very well take us down though our followers are loyal, even they have a facebook". Flup knew there was only one way to take down such an evil and persuasive foe like facebook. Flup said to Pico " We must tell a new story and we must make the people aware of facebook's darkness.

Sadly this is where the story ends, but my fellow Newgrounder's we must stand strong against facebook!
Erase your facebook account today NG has been around longer and it will never fade into darkness as facebook will.
It also will not steal your pictures and information without your permission, not to mention NG gives you credit for your work instead of just taking it and using it for their own Evil purposes