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-The Computer In Marvel Vs. Capcom 2 whenever Ryu or Ken is picked.

Holy Shit its been a while, been busy stirring up Trouble in the Writing Forum, christ I hope that's over with, anyway for a while I just had completely lost all creativity and played Uncharted 2 for a while, but now that I got Platinum on that Mofo I'm back for better or worse. I figured I'd draw something for Valentines Day: Not Finished sadly.

I think Uncharted 2 it has some of the most well rounded characters and best character interactions i've ever seen. It knows what it is and doesn't fuck around trying to be more. Plus its got a great story.

At 2/12/10 06:36 PM, TheSporkLord wrote: " oh hey it's a GoW clone" if you really want to go that way I could easily say all FPS suck because they're all basic clones. Fact is it's not another GoW, so don't treat it as such.

It may not be a clone but its still not a very good game, the nudity is not at all needed in a lot of parts it seems like a 12 year-old was in control of deciding where to put it, Dante's character is pretty boring and a Kratos rip-off. the combat looked good but doesnt feel as good as it should, enemies that keep respawning to lengthen the game gets to be very noticeable. But some of the environments are very well done as well as bosses. this may be a great game for 360 owners but there is no reason for a Ps3 owner to spend 60$ on this when God Of War 3 is so close.

Treyarch, they only survive because they are coasting off the success of Licensed material (Spider-Man) and making Call Of Duty, their work is laid out for them and I do not like it.

It seems like everyone here missed the point.

At 2/8/10 07:56 PM, FallenRevival wrote: Listen to yourself before you make another big block of text... Who ever said that this forum was just for poetry? Just because a guy posts poetry on his thread doesn't mean that he has to like it. He can easily turn it into a thread about short/long/fiction/nonfictional story writing if he wants.

I completely agree with you sir and can see there is a few logical thinking people in this Section of the BBS.

Yeah I know its a weird habit of mine to capitalize word that are in the middle of sentences. I only do it when typing though I can't explain why. (I capitalized a couple here but caught myself)

V2 you've obviously entirely missed the point of the Meat-Heads, its not a serious story, its not meant to be taken seriously its not meant to be thought through, I tried to make it as ridiculous as possible I mean Really Hitler gets brought back as a robot and a company of 110 genetically mutated supersoldiers with giant heads are the only force that can stop them who later get kidnapped by aliens. Go watch a cartoon seriously man its fun its silly its got an animal called the velocity Raptor. And as for the number of characters I have planned this out to have many books maybe not a hundred and ten but I've already started the overviews for about ten of them, 1, 2&7, 110, 42, the AES, and Fire team Vulcan.
I've posted my apology thing in one thread, this thread. The reason it all boils down to "I like it" is because thats what every review boils down to, you're just singling me out because you have a thing against me. And I have Read Fall Of Reach and a few other military books, if I wanted to do a serious War story then I would but frankly I don't like being normal and boring so I decided I'd do something more fun.

So after A run in with Version2 In TrevorW's other poetry thread where I made a valid reasonable argument against him having two threads dedicated to poetry and where I actually critiqued him in a way, not an angry way, I understand poetry I know good from bad and I can review it I am just repulsed the culture it is synonymous with which TrevorW has convinced me that he is not the repulsive type of poet. But Then Version2 came along, calling me a troll and that made me think "did he even read my posts?" as they were not in anyway attacking TrevorW just questioning the logic in the need for two poetry threads, then V2 had the balls to insult me, to flame me and then I got to thinking "that's my title here in the Writing forum, a hateful troll, though I did write an apology letter thingy on my page and in this thread and even sent shy2authentik a personal apology thingy I can tell that everyone has taken the V2 approach at my username and assuming that its full of hate when in reality its just a post, a post from someone who is writing narratives one of the few people who seem to be doing that in this section of the BBS, and they are getting ignored. DO I feel bad? Not really I voiced an opinion and got burned for it, not the first or last time that will happen, but Christ can you guys hold a grudge, I'd have forgotten by now and just moved on.

At 2/8/10 03:30 AM, Version2 wrote: Nobody cares what you think after that BS in your writing thread. How about you go post some more of your shitty notebook scribbles in the art forum?

I won't respond to this in Trevor's thread because frankly its meant for you, check your Inbox.
Anyway I just find it to be illogical to have 2 poetry threads regardless of the topic, piling on to that; where's the rest of the Jazzy Jazz stuff? I would like to read more from you as I somewhat like jazz.

At 2/7/10 11:08 PM, TrevorW wrote: We really leave it to the writer's opinion. Though over all we feel that it should mostly be in one topic. However, if a writer has something they feel would be better suited in a new topic its fine as long as that option is used in moderation.

well using that logic then I would think the best way to split it up would be Poetry and Narratives, not two threads for poetry because even though these are Jazzy Jazz and a different style of poetry from what you usually do its still poetry and should be kept in one thread, Were you to post A narrative though that would merit a new thread I find this one to be excessive.

Point remains, Though I am relatively new to this section of the BBS as I am normally in the art section where we are only supposed to have One thread in which all our work, regardless of what style it is or what program is used to make it, is posted for everyone to make a new thread for a different piece clutters the forum and doesn't make any sense.

Why make another thread? Its better to not clutter the forums and post in one.

Very descriptive, but thats all it really was, sure it was an internal struggle but I felt that after rereading it anxiety was just a safety net, something we all know about to make the story have more impact, which isn't bad lots of writers do it but if you characterized anxiety a little better it would make this good story great.

RAMBLINGS.
So A long time ago, probably when i was 8 no older than ten i realized that Devil is just evil with a D in front of it, and I sarcastically thought "How clever Church, you put a "D" in front of Evil." But then at 11 or so I thought "Hey maybe Devil came first and evil is Devil without the D" clever me Right? well wrong, cause I was thinking in a straight line, not branching from what I know. I later found out that the Bible wasn't originally written in English, not really found out so much as thought it through more, but anyway that lead me to think what the original name for devil (obviously being Satan, Lucifer, etc) those two obviously came first. I then concluded that Evil came first but was derived from Satan, or Hell or anything of that sort and that when it was brought over to be in english the translator decided that Evil was too general, that there needed to be a name, not a force as that was what Evil was general refereed to, a force not an entity so he hastily named satan the Devil. Now I know what you're thinking " Wikipedia Dumbass" but thats not the point, I doubt I will ever look this up because it gives me something to think about, something to entertain myself with, and i can't help but feel proud of myself for reasoning this without bothering to look it up even if its wrong it makes sense to me. I also learned from this train of thought that has spanned many years of my life in short instances to branch out with stories I write, or think about, that one perspective is boring that everyone has a story to tell, sure a lot aren't too interesting but every person in your stories should play a role that hold some effect, and then you could create alternatives from these events, take what seems like a small character's role out of a story then think it through greatly think what that person did to make you want to write them in, give them a name a life, their own story and then make them be somewhere else when your main guy is walking by and see what happens. If nothing does then you are doing it wrong, this character obviously was completely useless filler that doesn't need to be there in the first place so why bother with that one. Try again make the character interact with your main guy in someway be it a stare or have them bump into each other, go in depth with the main guy's feelings toward this meeting, make it have some form of impact on the main guy then give him an attitude to match it like a real person would. Example if the side character bumps into your hero and is an asshole about it have it put a damper on your character's day and make him have a reaction that you would have or a real human would, if its a big man and the characters a skinny wimpy guy then he obviously would have an offensive "Fuck You" attitude. Or if the character bumps into a beautiful girl causing her to drop something have him act according to his character traits if he's a nice guy he'll help her out and if he's a dick he'll call her a stupid bitch or something. Point being these are the things that make good, interesting characters which can make a bad story good and a great story amazing. But there are some problems to this, these interactions mustn't seemed forced, they have to flow naturally with the story they can't just be thrown in carelessly.

Well that was quite the ramble, feel free to post your own ramblings here if you wanna bother... but then there aren't many people here in this thread for good reason too this whole BBS section is chalk-full of poets and I've pretty much alienated them from this thread what with the whole 1st page deal.

I fail to see the need to have two threads with your work, two that are poetry based nonetheless.

But other than that they're pretty standard as far as Jazz related songs/poems/whatever go, its got dancing and moving with rhyming and sexual innuendo, though there is severe deficit of 'Kool Kats" or any other cats for that matter

I eat scope for breakfast, you may have the most no scopes but you forget that other people don't give a shit and will shoot you using a scope and win because you are retarded and think No scopes R TEH 1337, but really its just a sniper kill at least to everyone you no scope it is.

Well I'm back hear after a few days of not being able to post anything out of not writing anything but here's a short 1 paged story thing journal entry thing I wrote Enjoy:

"Desperation"
Jack d. Curleo

11:20 pm March 6th 2024
Journal entry 132 Robert Hall
It's been four days since Will and I have had a meal. The food depravation is really beginning to get to me, I can feel my stomach slowly consuming my internal organs, the pain is tearing at my very essence and I will surely be dead within the next forty-eight hours. Will lies sleeping on one of the ratty beds we were able to salvage from an old broken down apartment building, the broken down complex may have made a great home if the damn BlackStar base hadn't been only two miles from it, luckily though we found this old bunker probably once housed a scientist or doctor considering all the medical papers and charts, but now I'm just getting off topic. But this journal is my only bastion of sanity and release from this world, a friend who cannot think, a dummy that only can listen not talk, it won't betray me like I know Will is already thinking about doing. He's a much larger man than I, he will probably kill me tomorrow and there is no way I could possibly defend myself he wakes up before me and will kill me in my sleep and eat me to curb his hunger. But I refuse too be eaten so easily he will not kill me I will survive even if it means I must end him tonight that treacherous bastard will die for his betrayals.
I see him lying there asleep, unknowing, starving and uncomfortable he has no idea that is hourglass is running low and soon he will succumb to my ax which on this night will be filling in for Grim's scythe. I approach the slumbering monster-to-be and plot out my actions to end Will's life. I draw my hatchet test its sharpness, and approach my newfound enemy. The blade seems to be glowing as I hold it up I see my target a line drawn in my head projected onto Will's tender neck. I am upon him, he is facing me, eye-contact blocked by his eyelids, his face twitches I was scared that he would wake before I delivered the killing blow I raise the hatchet high above my head free hand out stretched clutching the air above his torso As I bring my hand down I let out what would be mistaken for a battle cry. The ax cuts deep, demolished the trachea and all neck muscles in is way crushing past the spinal cord, blood splatters across my shirt and face my goggles kept the blood from stinging my eyes. But allowing me a better view of what I had done. The jolt of the strike ran up my arm through to my mind, and down to my stomach which was now unsettled. Just what I had done has finally dawned on me; I looked down on the hatchet that I was now squeezing tightly in a death grip oh how I wish it was in fact a death grip that would mea a release from this newfound madness within me. Angered at what I had done I brought the weapon up and screamed in mental agony as my conscience tore my morality to shreds, I cast the bloody hatchet with all my fury it flew into a wall I heard the clang of metal a it stuck into the metal wall of this forsaken bunker. I began to puke as I stared down at the deed I had just carried out I was no longer hungry and doubt I ever will be again.
Will is now dead, he never knew it was coming I had taken a life in cold blood, which isn't the first time I have, but damn it those weren't my friends, not my partner, just faceless bandits and desperados roaming these wastes killing and pillaging as Will and I have been for the past years. But no more shall he wander this wasted world I had taken this paradise from him, two lives destroyed with one hatchet. I know I can never let this go and I don't want to, no man should be left unpunished for taking the life of a friend in cold blood non the less. Rereading this entry I find that I had blinded myself with the insanity of food depravation, but now looking back on it with a clear perspective I find myself unable to believe this, but the end result is undeniable as Will lies bloodied and nearly headless eyes still closed, still sleeping and forever will be because of me.
12:25 am March 7th 2024

You're a little late on Resistance 2, I've platinum'd it and reached level 30 for every class but I just picked up MAG and play as SVER, I'm not gonna go outta my way to add you but you can add me PSN ID: The_Enemy69

So, I've put plenty of stories up on my thread, or at least overviews, and would like some feedback, I'm sure a lot of you are still less than happy with me about the poetry thing but what I've posted is fairly good in my opinion and at least deserves a look..

At 2/2/10 07:35 AM, FallenRevival wrote: Is there anyway to get a name change btw?

You mean like your username? cause I don't think so short of making a new account anyway.

Huh?

At 2/1/10 10:59 PM, FallenRevival wrote:

At 2/1/10 10:58 PM, TrevorW wrote: Anyways, again I really like this. But post some of your other stuff...geez

Too lazy.

Never a good response.

Wasteland: The Series
The Wasteland series is A project that I've been thinking out for months, The series picks up after third World War which was caused in Guardian, Stinch: Time Cop and Stinch: The Lost.
The Scientist from Guardian goes public with his technology to turn minds into files and as the World War broke out millions of people reserved a place in the master-drive (The Mega-computer with near infinite memory space that will serve as humanity's new home). Though only about thirty million were able to gain access the Master-Drive the remaining humans were either killed during the war or bombing. Now twenty-five years later the world lies near ruin, but humanity has hung on to Earth and is still the dominant species, but the living people are all either Raiders and bandits, brotherhoods, cults, lone wanderers, and heroes, there is no room for cowards in the wasteland no room for Fear it is do or die in this world and many will die.
Note: This is a planned series, with many different styles.
FIRST story to be told:
Wastelanders: Bubs N' Gerald.
Style: Eccentric, gratuitously violent, stylish, fun, lighthearted, Comicbook-like. Inspired by Borderlands.
Main Characters: Protagonists: Bubs N' Gerald; both were military bio weapons designed for infiltration of enemy bases and went through basic training together and bore the same flag(flags indicate what preset partner they'd get) the two were activated 10 years after the World became a Wasteland and went trough the month long process of maturation in the wasteland battling Bandits seven times their size. Both are great warriors, brutal and borderline insane.
Character Traits:
Bubs: All American badass attitude, loud carries a Revolver the size of a medium rifle enjoys getting up close and personal with his enemies, he smokes cigarettes as all Wastelanders do. Clad in a trenchcoat and alway wears sunglasses (Pictures of both Bubs and Gerald are in the Art Portal just check my page out).
Gerald: A much slicker cool level-headed character than bubs' loud BANG BANG BANG style, That doesn't make Gerald the serious on though. He Wields a Combat shotgun with a makeshift bayonet (Combat knife taped to end of barrel) showing that he is much more smart in his weapon choice. Gerald has no less than six weapons on him at one time ranging from knives to Piano wire to old rags, he has a very dark sense of humor and does most of the talking which isn't much considering both he and Bubs follow the shoot first, raid camp for food and ammo and leave mentality.
The Duo of Wastelanders are in no way a force of good, they are just survivors, and they are damn good at it.
Main characters: antagonists: Commander Doom, General Death-Face, Major Torture, and Captain Murder.
[More to come later.]

Ah now it makes more sense.

Well after years of studying them I have deduced that girls are in fact human beings, and men even nerdy men should not fear talking to them or asking them on a date because chances are if you get to know the girl you'll hang out with her sometime and then you can get to know her and BAM girlfriend easy as that (results may vary) but really this poem is borderline creepy and on top of that it feels a little inconsistent at times, but you are dealing with quite the general shy love crush poem thing that every poet and their dog has done to the power of infinity, be original, write a poem about a dinosaur or space teradactal(misspelled) blaze a trail don't catch the embers of another.

Well sir do enlighten us.

At 2/1/10 01:09 AM, Deathcon7 wrote: It's the most approachable form of writing. Everyone thinks they can be a poet, that's why a lot of people insist on writing it.

That and the ladies love poetry for some reason, at least mine does, and every other lady I've met.

What's this now, five in a row? oh well carrying on.

Red Basic Idea.
Setting: A Comicbook-style Metropolis where Superheroes roam about defeating supervillains foiling doomsday schemes every month, causing millions of dollars in property damage and putting civilian lives in danger. Everyone in that world is content with it and does not care and showers the Heroes with praise and don't care that the villains always end up escaping from prison or that sometimes the heroes team up with them for the greater good and let them escape. everyone, except a young woman.

Main Character: A young woman named... Alice(?)(Not sure on that yet). Alice had never liked the Superheroes or supervillains, she thought that regular people would live perfectly fine lives without the heroes and villains, and notices that its stupid that the heroes don't just kill the villains and fix the issue entirely. But one day while walking her dog, (once her Dad's dog before he passed away) One of the Villains is in the process of robbing a bank that she is walking by, A hero smashes through a wall by way of an explosive energy blast to get into the bank, Alice's dog is already old and the excitement was too much for him, and he died. This was the final straw for Alice, angry and full of hate she sees that a police officer was knocked unconscious during the superhero breaking through the wall without notice, she grabs his gun puts up the hood of her jacket (Which is Red) walks up behind the superhero who is too busy having a comic book prefight stand off with the villain to notice her, she raises the gun up to the back of his head and blows a hole straight through his brain. The Supervillain gets scared by the unexpected death of a hero, and panics trying to run out the door which is behind Alice, she empties the gun's magazine into the villain and leaves, the impact of what she had done will soon dawn on her, but she will not run and hide, she will not stand ad fight either, she will learn every hero's and villain's weakness and dedicate her life to ridding the world of these freaks donning the title Red, dressed in a red hood She will kill the World's heroes and villains leaving only normal people to live in peace.