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Alright this is my first post to the writing thread(didn't even know there was one until I stumbled upon it by mistake) any stories I tell here are probably some of my potential graphic novels, or tv program if I manage to become a film maker(some of my stories belong more on tv than on the big screen).
I'll start off with a miniaturized version of the first story I came up with(waaaaay to long to post the entire thing, it's not even finished yet and I've been adding stuff to it since I was in the 5th grade). It is titled The Elements and is basically a story of you guessed it elementals. Although not officially since they are extraterrestrial they have been here a long time. This is the prolouge to the story, it focuses on an elemental named David.

Elements: The Beginning

In the darkest depths of space, where even the light fails I live. Tormented by memories I'd much rather forget I guard my haunt. No being has lived as long as I and none ever will, for I am embedded into the very womb of time. I see none and they do not see me for that is the way things must be, I forever imprisoned will find a way out, no matter the price.

I was imprisoned unjustly for a crime I did not do consciously. What did they expect? They took me from my beloved and brought out the beast within. Did the assume that they would be able to control this amount of power, or did they merely seek their own destruction? Why did I have to be cursed by this wretched power, I can naught but destroy, even those who I most loved feared what I had become.

I assume that they knew that their plan had succeeded but they did not want the people to know. The fear of rebellion was ever present in their minds. They could not realize the full extent of my power and neither could I. With just a simple gesture I destroyed half of my state. Oh how I wished I had fought back when I had the chance, they did not even respect the fact that I was one of the 13 Dominus Domino. I was presented before the other 12 and was held under trial. They unanimously decided that I was to be placed on the Inverter Penalty, which was one of the worst punishments one could receive. It involved the prisoner being launched into what humans call a black hole. Our planet was relatively close to it the distance only being 3 lightyears. Oh how I wish now that I had fought back then!

I cannot begin to describe the insufferable pain I experienced when I felt myself leave this universe. I was stuck in a state of limbo in which nothing else moved except me as I was stretched into the black hole. I have no idea how long it must have been to me, but I do note that I had finally ceased to exist in this universe. I believe that the council must have assumed that I had died when I crossed the event horizon I was dead. Unfortunately for the both of us I was still very much alive, and in fact was able to move fairly easily after a few minutes. I assume that it must have been the nature of my power that prevented me from dying and as such was able to eventually cease the pain. I chose to stay where I was until I became acquainted with my powers.

It has now been a year since I was imprisoned and am on the eve of my escape, soon I will be free and nothing can prevent that, except for the creator, but he has long since abandoned us in pursuit of a planet fit for a being created in his image. Even if the creator has chosen to forget me I will not forget him and I plan to arrive at this place where his image is and destroy it. I plan to escape the next time the star Ruptis passes me.

Even though it was painful beyond belief I struggled to escape the clutches of this black hole, I persevered knowing that in my freedom not only would I avenge myself by destroying my planet, but I would also destroy that for which the creator abandoned us. Many long and painful days of struggling finally rendered me free of the wretched gravity. I Tauros was the only being that had ever escaped the deepest bowels of the universe and was back for my revenge!

The time spent in the black hole changed my powers, it had amplified them and now I knew that I was ready for my revenge. I will pay back those who hurt me threefold. They screamed when they saw me and my power, now they knew the presence of true power and it was horrifyingly unimaginable. No one thought that I would be able to escape and no one knew that upon my arrival the planet was doomed to destruction. Due to my presence upsetting the gravity produced by the planet, it became unstable and relied on me to prevent self-destruction. This I knew and was the reason I left but a few hours after my arrival after collecting the materials needed for my plan.

I had acquired a device that enabled me to seek out other life in the universe and to see their appearance and time of creation. I searched for a few years and finally set out to the Milky Way Galaxy as it is called by the humans. While the planet was lifeless it showed promising signs that the creator had been there. I built up asteroids around myself until I had formed a mass roughly the size of a small planet. I soon broke the light barrier and found myself in what I believe to have been a wormhole, this resulted in me arriving adjacent to the planet known as Earth and collided with it. The impact caused many events which are now considered to have been natural, I was soon buried deep in the crust of this planet (I now know that my asteroid is called Theia in the giant impact hypothesis.). Soon I lay dormant waiting for the day in which I would be released from my new prison. It will be a dark day for the inhabitants of this planet when I arise!

That ends the prologue, so what do you guys think of it? Note that this is merely the prologue so it wasn't anywhere near as long as the actual story. But this was my first written piece of fiction which I actually completed.

Please, Critique! :)

and this one here is the reaper that died and had his inter dimensional abilities taken. This is him as he crosses dimensions, all color disappears and it switches to only black and white.

Oh yeah and before I forget hey Big-Johnny did you get a new sig or is it just me?

Oh and here's one of the two that were slaughtered by the reaper with no neck, this is how no neck got his locusts power. This guy got killed and his locust's went to the other guy.

Hey guys is it just me or have some of the pics I posted disapeared, not only that but my entire thread has shifted or something idk anyone else who posted first notice anything?

And here's another one that I drew the same day, notice that I paid more attention to details and not really the reaper himself.

At 1/25/10 08:35 AM, big-jonny-13 wrote: Just realized that your Reaper has barely any neck.

LIke I said he's not this universe's reaper he belongs to a different one. But yeah he's a bit deformed, although not by much by reaper standards. Oh and the short neck is probably due to the fact that he mainly floats and doesn't really walk much.

sorry for replying a bit late, had to take an entrance exam for the school I'm entering, hope I get accepted.

Oh and I had a temporary relieve from my drawer's block and drew this reaper on monday! :D

BAM! Yeah since this version of the Grim Reaper doesn't have a shapechanging scythe he can summon locust's at will.

BTW this pic is huge in it's regular size.

Really? Not even 1 person thinks anything?

Does anyone even look at these new drawings, or does everyone see them but just choose to critique my old ones?

Sorry for the delay in posting new stuff, I was applying to a magnet highschool so I kinda got held up. Anyways here's the incarnation of the Grim Reaper for Universe-23748_Delta. Tried to make him represent a much more physical reaper that reeks of badassness(made up word). Yes that is skin, he takes the skin from the recently buried so that his physical form has more resemblance to a human than to a skeleton. This is his "flight mode" he uses it to travel at speeds of up to 50 light years per millisecond. The speed resulting from this version being the grim reaper in multiple dimensions and universes due to the fact that this Grim Reaper killed the Grim Reaper for each respective dimension and universe.

Tell me what you guys think of it :D!

At 1/17/10 06:48 PM, ashman112 wrote:

At 1/17/10 06:46 PM, GMoose14 wrote: Hurray! 76 Post! Wow people must really like my stuff.

Although over half the posts are by me :(

76 posts in the thread and 76 posts by you, that is a rare coincidence

now 77 posts

heheh yeah I kinda have posted a lot in my thread.... oh and I might draw something new soon, mayhaps Tauros Morissa in his "human" form. :D

Hurray! 76 Post! Wow people must really like my stuff.

Although over half the posts are by me :(

Hehe, I just realized that the grim reaper I uploaded isn't the one I currently have....

I'll just leave this here...Enjoy!

Managed to color it, and yes it's supposed to be dark in some parts, what do you guys think?

At 1/14/10 08:55 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote:

At 1/14/10 08:44 PM, GMoose14 wrote:

Does no one look at my drawings anymore?

I do, but I just haven't thought of any good comments.

Well at least someone's looking,by the way any tips on my current wip?

Same as the one before but with more detail.

Does no one look at my drawings anymore?

...

Oh, and what do you guys think about my new sig?

Oh and I forgot to mention that he is Tauros Morissa the guy whom the dread lock dude tried to fight. Whereas the Non-human is part elemental part human Tauros is 100% elemental. The thing is that Tauros controls one of the 10 Creation powers, he controls Gravity and every thing to do with it. If anyone wants to hear what the other 10 are just ask.

I really liked the flames, keep up the good work:D

Then you're gonna love these, it's still a work in progress and as can be seen I'm trying something new.

Is it any good at this stage?

At 1/11/10 07:29 PM, Weenog wrote: I especialy like the head of your first drawing, most of your characters faces are actualy pretty good. what you gotta do is start studying the human body and its proportions and find more dynamic poses for your characters, if you start drawing from real life and memorising the things you see, all of your drawing will improve. what especialy bothers me is the arms. you can't get away with just drawing bumps on both sides. you gotta think on where the muscles and bones are located, just look at your own arms in the mirror if you hafto. btw, despite what you think, the angel girl is far from your best work... owh, and stick figures are only good for working out a dynamic pose for your character as a skeleton of some sort. once you find the proper pose, build your character around it. also, one of the mistakes i often made in the past is having my characters limbs seem stiff, you don't always hafto draw knees and elbows in a sharp angle, sometimes a smooth curve works alot better.

Thanks for being one of the few who actually told me advice and did not just merely say it in a few words. In fact I think we need more people on the forums who actually give a reasonable response to a thread.

Oh and before I forget, does anyone have any ideas for what I should draw next, cause' I feel like my ideas were washed away, so I kinda need help thinking of new ones.

At 1/10/10 05:04 PM, gmanthesandwhichking wrote: I think your stuff is a little to tall and skinny, also a little 2-D. Sorry man, I hate to give bad critique.

The non-humans are supposed to be tall and skinny hence the NON-human. And about the 2D I have no idea how to change that...but yeah some of them are kinda flat.

Here's another non-human I am adding to the collection don't have a name for him yet though, he wears that mask to filter the air since he can't breathe normal air. He's pretty small for a non-human being only about 7 feet tall.

What do you guys think?

At 12/25/09 06:33 PM, jaimito wrote: I've done this zombies for a videogame project that I'm working on.

heh, it's Micheal Jackson and Hitler.

At 1/7/10 10:46 PM, GMoose14 wrote: I know it's probably crap but I felt like putting up anyways.

And yes it is a zombie head, it got decapitated but that won't quench it's thirst for BRAINS!!!

Sorry for the double post.

I know it's probably crap but I felt like putting up anyways.

At 1/7/10 10:01 PM, Chrisman01 wrote: *bump*

for 12 days and no reply... after this I won't bump again :(

Ya know, you're supposed to bump with pics...

His name is M. Robet. Oh and he's liquid chrome. And the greenish black thing in the center is his source of energy, and those black things on the bottom are tire treads aka tank wheels

Yeah I got my style back!!! Check it out I can draw different angles again! I've been in a funk lately so my art has been mainly stick figures but check this out!

The proportions are supposed to look like that since he's not entirely human as can be seen by his eyes and the fact that he has grey fire. Part of my non-human collection, the other one is the guy with dreadlocks on the first page.

a flash will ruin it. Definetly become an expert photographer when it comes to taking pictures of your art, spread the light source evenly, and buy a stand for your camera or something.

As for the picture itself, no stick figures please! Your art is above that. As for everything else though, it's looking good. :)

What about the big guns?

That sucks :/ got plenty of jobs here in Holland, and not only for 16 y/olds, you can start from 15 years here.
Meh, Camera with flash would screw it up even more, making your pic too bright, and we won't be able to see anything.
Maybe you could do small jobs for people? I mean, a sufficiently good scanner shouldn't cost more than maybe a 100$ nowadays... you could gather it easily...

Oooor, you can start drilling your parents about it, until they get tired by it and just buy it for you ^.^

Yeah I could but they'd probably say no since $100 is no small thing if you don't see a point to buying it. It's ironic that I should need a scanner since my dad found a brand new one like 5 years ago( that was around the time I started to learn how to use a computer) and I gave it away since I had no idea what it did...I regretted it a month later when I found out what it did.

At 1/7/10 07:50 PM, Falonefal wrote: Dude, get a scanner, having your pic darkened like that really spoils the fun to look at it.
It's really good, only wish I could see it in better resolution.

Unfortunately for me I'm not 16 yet so I can't get a job to buy one, especially with the state the economy is in. :( I should get a camera with flash or something...

Bam! This is the final copy of The War of the Hills- Invasion, which is the first of a series of these.