Should there be particle effect elements in the game?

If we can only cast one vote, I am choosing this one. I know it was the one I submitted... but I just love it so freaking much.

WhatD'YouThinkOfMyDadNow?, by BenjaminMarker Type: Movie Rating: Ages 17+

Also, I thought this one was a just great. Should have been Quirky though.

Criminal!, by Tugoro Type: Movie Rating: Ages 13+

stalagamite you forgot your pic. we want our tits.

EVERYONE SHOULD HAVE THEIR STORE CREDIT NOW! :)

AND FRONT PAGE.

DAMMIT FORGOT THE PIC AHHHHHHHHHHHHH

***I will make that ambience for you guys and see if it suits. All i have right now is this and im not sure if its punkish or not heeh.***

Waves of Diamond, by FatKidWitAJetPak Type: SongGenre: Ambient

This is the kind of texture monoprint art I do. I would be able to make some very cool backgrounds with this style. I could also fill in buildings and walls with a certain texture for each material like metal, grass, wood, except it would look a lot cooler.

Alright guys, i suggest we start saying what each of us can offer for the team

Here is what i can offer:

VOICE ACTING

DESIGN

SOUND

For the design I would make a MONOPRINT TEXTURE and lay inside of objects. By a monoprint texture i mean making a texture with monoprint ink. i think it would give everything a nice ZAP if you know what I mean. Everything would look very punkish and darkish.

For the voice acting i would voice act 3 main characters.

For the sound I can make very creepy background music, which I will upload soon. I will also make sound effects like explosions and things.

is this all fine and dandy or am I misunderstanding something?

At 11/8/09 04:38 PM, EmperorCharlemagne wrote:

At 11/8/09 04:30 PM, MW10T wrote: No front page?

You must not be good enough.

Im gonna shove a metal pipe up your ass.

The front pagers are coming soon enough. Also the update on who will run the next contest will come. And the prize money. AND a front page post about this by the Tom Fulp himself!

Here is the final entry for the Arkansas "Night At the Museum" logo competition. If they like this, they will use it for the logo for the next three years. We were supposed to have a moon, a building with an episcopal symbol on it, and it needed to be at night, Here it is.

At 11/8/09 05:44 PM, Abuelodigital17 wrote:

I read yours. Personally I love the idea of a prison in a black ocean with endless mazes of glass chambers and strange "wardens" with blades and glowing blue eyes and weird movements. Its all very creepy. I loved the description of the man sitting next to the main character with his belley button ripped out, good description. In other wrods, your main good point is the way you develop your atmosphere.

As for the bad side, it was a very confusing story. The ending was a bit strange and didnt make all that much sense. You could have made it clearer about what that place was. It could have been a scientific test or a prison.

I'm glad you liked it. It's my first horror story and I wasn't sure if it was scary or not. I understand why you think it's confusing. Some things were obvious to me because I'm the one who is writing it... Besides, I like leaving things unexplained so that the reader has to tie the loose ends by himself.

I also thought that it would be impossible for the man to survive more than a minute in the ocean because the waves were moving so quickly that the blood would have been rushed out of his body very quickly.

I don't know... salty water makes blood clot faster but maybe you're right.

I was just confused by many of the things that happened.

Hint: the main character is female, not male... re-read the ending and you will understand what happened.
I can explain everything , just ask me and I'll answer your questions ;) I have some questions about your story as well, if you're willing to explain the things I didn't understand let me know.

I give you a 6.8/10

Wonderful atmosphere, confusing plot, strange and exotic characters, poor design, overall preety good job man.

What do you mean when you say 'poor design'? (I want to improve).
Thanks for the feedback!

the design is the main thing that brought down your score. It was too chaotic. I understand that sometimes in punk genre the story tries to make things seem chaotic and clautophobic and tries to make the reader feel what che character is feeling, but this was just to chaotic. I realize that we have a 5000 word limit which means you sometimes have to skip straight to the point of each paragraph, but you still had a good amount of words that you could have written. I suggest switching each scene eith a bit more organization. For example, you made the long wait of going on the lift just two seconds for the reader. Then all of a sudden he was outside and in the ocean in the next sentence. Use your good description skills to set up some things before jumping from one thought to the next.

Please pay in mind that just because I think your story is disorganized does not mean that others will as well. Others might take it to be organized because it is supposed to be disorganized, as in the classic chaotic feeling the story should give, but I felt that you should have been a bit more organized in plot so that I would understand clearly what was going on.

And remember, I still enjoyed your ideas! You were very creative man and truly have potential as a writer. Good luck in your future writing and I hope my jib jabbering will be able to help in some way.

At 11/7/09 11:30 AM, Abuelodigital17 wrote:

At 11/6/09 06:48 PM, TheReno wrote: I will review peoples stories if you want but you have to specifically ask me. If you just post the vague "it would be cool if someone would review my story" Im not going to even look at it.

Cool. Please review my story. I want to improve.

I read yours. Personally I love the idea of a prison in a black ocean with endless mazes of glass chambers and strange "wardens" with blades and glowing blue eyes and weird movements. Its all very creepy. I loved the description of the man sitting next to the main character with his belley button ripped out, good description. In other wrods, your main good point is the way you develop your atmosphere.

As for the bad side, it was a very confusing story. The ending was a bit strange and didnt make all that much sense. You could have made it clearer about what that place was. It could have been a scientific test or a prison. I also thought that it would be impossible for the man to survive more than a minute in the ocean because the waves were moving so quickly that the blood would have been rushed out of his body very quickly. I was just confused by many of the things that happened.

I give you a 6.8/10

Wonderful atmosphere, confusing plot, strange and exotic characters, poor design, overall preety good job man.

Alright im about to review a couple of stories, to make this fair I will review the first two who respond to this post. I would also enjoy it if someone were to review mine as well, its my first one so dont be like THIS SUCKED lol. ;)

This was my first monoprint ever. Very simple, yet very nice. i drew the heart first and then added black around it, it is just one layer because i didnt understand the process of layering at the time.

Time: 2 days

___Fruit___

if you like this i could make it much longer.

Just One, by FatKidWitAJetPak Type: SongGenre: Classical

or heres this.

Waves of Diamond, by FatKidWitAJetPak Type: SongGenre: Ambient

Well thats my two entries :)

Good luck.

At 11/6/09 07:05 AM, flyingmonkey456 wrote:

At 11/4/09 09:29 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote: I am about to do my first lithograph where I carve some designs into a wooden type material and use it to make a crazy cool textureized background.

Lithograph means stone picture, lith meaning stone as in monolith or neolithic and graph meaning writing or picture as in graphic or telegraph. The phrase you're looking for is woodcut.

Drat! Ive never cared much for using the exact terms for art anyhow because I focus on the creative elements rather than going by the rule book. Well thanks for clearing that up.

At 11/6/09 06:57 AM, J-qb wrote:

At 11/5/09 10:36 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote:

At 11/5/09 08:03 AM, J-qb wrote: youve got some cool stuff in here... It would be nice to have the proportions of the works.

You mean the originals? I am selling them in an auction... you can bet a small amount if you want lmao.

I think I meant proportions as in size? How big are the originals?

The originals are usually about three times the size of a spread out hand. The girl one is 1200 by 1600 and the night at the church is 1200 by 1600 as well.

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For todays pic, I am posting an experimental one that took me three weeks to do. It is called an etching monoprint. First I sketched the picture on a piece of paper and put it behind a clear plastic plate. Then i got an etching tool and traced the sketch, embedding lines into the platstic. The I got a large amount of brown etching ink and rolled it all over the plastic plate. I removed the ink in a certain way to make it how I wanted it. Then I placed the plate on a press and forced everything onto a piece of monoprint paper. I repeated this process three times to make it light, dark, and then very dark. This was originally A JOKE because I knew I sucked at drawing these sort of things, but I laugh every time I look at it and think it actually looks kind of cool. So enjoy it :P

Time: 2 - 3 weeks.

___A Duck, A Turtle, And A Beaver___

At 11/5/09 08:34 PM, jmalouin7 wrote:

At 11/5/09 08:32 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote: Ok man great! Ill check yours out as well as the other guys. This is fun.

For someone who was suppose to be leaving Newgrounds you sure are taking your sweet time doing so...

Hi Spock :)

Hey mind your own businees there boyyy. I got involved in this writing thing, my bad :/

Plus i still have tons of loose ends to tie like finish up the voice acting contest, whichi i just finished, compelte 2 collabs, and do some scripts. im just mainly limiting my time on ng right now.

SPPPOOCCKK

At 11/5/09 08:03 AM, J-qb wrote: youve got some cool stuff in here... It would be nice to have the proportions of the works.

You mean the originals? I am selling them in an auction... you can bet a small amount if you want lmao. I dont think you want to spend your money for noob made art though haha. i can take pictures of the full monoprint paper if you want, showing how deep the press dug into the paper and all those details.

Here is another one I made. This one took me a week. Its two layers of black night background, two layers of that moon, and one layer of the church with a photoshopped window. I am entering it into a logo contest for an art show. I need to type in some letters, ill do it in Flash probably.

___Night At The Church___

Ok man great! Ill check yours out as well as the other guys. This is fun.

At 11/4/09 10:14 PM, ornery wrote:

At 11/4/09 09:29 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote: I am about to do my first lithograph where I carve some designs into a wooden type material and use it to make a crazy cool textureized background.

I think you mean woodcut, not lithograph. Also a great little trick I learned in the small amount of monoprinting I did was modeling glue, or really any glue for that matter, you can draw with it in big globs and it makes for some pretty nifty shapes and textures when you ink it (after it dries of course)

I have been trying to find a liquid that drops like blood does, a sort of nice splatter effect. I tried this with glue and got some surprising effects, but it was just an experiment. I thought i meant a lithograph, thats what our professor told us it was called err... hmm... lol.

I will experiment with more styles of background making. I am actually thinking of just getting some fake blood to try and make a nice blood drip effect for a monoprint i have been wanting to make of a girl standing in a field of flowers with blood dripped over her body. Dark yeah whatever ;)

Holy crap! You really are good with making different types of material like leather and cotton... your good at this!

Ok just one more, this one was done with a Silhouette. Instead, I added three layers of ink at complete random to create an abstract piece. It sort of looks like a japanese painting.

Time: 45 minutes *To try and achieve that random yet pretty style I was aiming for*

___The Shrine___

Well thats all for now! Hope you enjoy my art, im still a noob so please dont be to harsh x(

Next, I have my most recent one. I did it in two days. It is done like the Storm one, except I was really surprised at the outcome of how 3D it looks. This is my favorite one so far. Making the texture really determines the outcome of the piece.

Time: 2 Days

___The Hole___

Here is one that i made in two days. I added one layer of a mixed color of ink onto a plastic plate as a normal monoprint is done, texturized it with my nifty dandy paintbrush, and then I added a silhouette of a boat. It sort of looks like it is on fire, I enjoyed the effect.

Time: 2 Days

___Storm___

My high school is lucky enough to have a monoprinting art class where we learn all of the types of monoprinting techniques and enter contests. I have always wondered what people thought of my art so I submitted some of my stuff to the art portal. I am a beginner artist, finding that I can only draw in the monoprinting enviroment because of the way you create everything. My favorite thing to do is ink a few layers of a dark and texturized background, then do a silhouette of an object or person ontop of it. I have been monoprinting now for 10 weeks. I am about to do my first lithograph where I carve some designs into a wooden type material and use it to make a crazy cool textureized background. I am using this technique to make an island floating in space. It will take some time, but I hope to finish it in a maximum of three weeks. It usually takes me 2 days to a week to complete a monoprint.

Well anyway, I hope i can use this thread to show my prints, but I was also hoping to use it to show others as well. If there is anyone who does monoprinting, feel free to post your stuff here! Just take a picture of it, crop it with a simple photo editor, and upload it here! I hope to see some nice comments... and bad ones heheh. Hope you enjoy!

To start off, I will show one of my favorites. The girl is a fan art of a design done by a graffitti artist named Banksy. I redrew the girl to the best of my abilities, although I originally planned to put an elephant with balloons hehe. This was made by cutting out squares of cardboard, and adding a second layer of cardboard where those green blocks are. I then put on some strings and pieces of hair to make the scratched texture. This way it adds depth to the picture. Then I inked it with a full layer of blackish brown ink, let it dry, and inked with a a blue and green to make the color you see now. Then I added a layer of clear spraypaint that would allow the ink to stay fresh and lift off of the cardboard easier, and added a final layer of some whitepaint stuff that mixes with all the colors to make them pop out clearer. After it all mixed I put it through a printing press and made the background. Then I did silhouette of the girl with balloons.

TIME: 2 weeks

__The Wall__

Wow i forgot all about this! im gonna work on my piece now. im doing a monoprint. Check some of my crappy art if you want an example of what i can do lol.

I was talking to denzel, we are wodnering when this thing is gonna come out.

WOO. Hey guys thanks for your help! I will PM Tom Fulp after we finalize this. I feel kind of sad having to let go *sniff* they grow up so fast!!! Ill pm you both the info and we can converse words and stuff.

Update on this soon!

That's why i love working for Denzel. He is such an awesome animator. I mean just LOOK AT THAT. I am putting in special effects for him using fuse coding. These effects will be used to give sparkles and things to the character. Youll see.

in the meantime, I will need to really focus on my voice. Harvest, would you mind telling me what I need to do? Should I PM all of the animators and tell them I am giving the voice acting a shot? If there is already a voice actor I completely understand. Ooohhh im getting excited though heh.

I wish I could give feedback, but sadly I do not find myself a very creditable reviewer on these stories. I do not have the experience of writing as many of you great legends such as WritersBlock do. However, I do know if I personally enjoy a story or not so I can give some feedback for whoever needs it. Anyone wish for me to give that a shot?

Hey guys, some people have been asking me if i could voice act for this and sure I would be happy to. So does this mean i will be voicing all the parts so the voice sounds the same? Sorry about posting that silly punk sotry earlier, i didnt realize we were choosing to do Lady Noir.

Thanks guys! I hope people will accept me as a voice actor for this hehe

At 11/3/09 10:24 PM, BankingOntheEnemy wrote:

At 11/3/09 10:03 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote: i posted my first story ever so i dont know what people are going to think.

I'll review it for you. I already read a bit of it but I haven't read the whole thing yet.

Wow dude, that would be fantastic! Are you sure man? Its kind of long hehe.

i posted my first story ever so i dont know what people are going to think.