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Edited at 2014-10-25 10:26:01

At 10/25/14 07:33 AM, SilverFoxJams wrote: This seems like a very dark, and twisted plot/character bio. I'm not so sure I'd read more about this. You might want to think over your plot and this character and change things. That's my suggestion. What's important in sharing your written works around others is to come up with a character people can relate to, and care about. If she's so bad, wouldn't it be better to do a story in which she goes through the process of becoming a better person, instead of doing crime through the slavery stuff?

Though, I wish you luck, if that route is something you really want to go towards.

I'm so sure people feel they can relate to Walter White. lmao
In case you didn't know, writers put themselves first when they write, because that is what results in quality.
In other words, my talent lies in darkness :)

At 10/25/14 07:33 AM, SilverFoxJams wrote: This seems like a very dark, and twisted plot/character bio. I'm not so sure I'd read more about this. You might want to think over your plot and this character and change things. That's my suggestion. What's important in sharing your written works around others is to come up with a character people can relate to, and care about. If she's so bad, wouldn't it be better to do a story in which she goes through the process of becoming a better person, instead of doing crime through the slavery stuff?

Though, I wish you luck, if that route is something you really want to go towards.

I'm so sure people feel they can relate to Walter White. lmao
In case you didn't know, writers put themselves first when they write, because that is what results in quality.
In other words, my talent lies in darkness :)

and... just because you cant relate to something doesn't mean no one else can. how old are you, 12?