Score: 6
"Ehm, when did the beat come?"
date: September 28, 2008
Ok, now this song lacked rythm, it lacked a point, and above all it lacked, like... The beat...
Ok first off, the piano intro made me expect something really cool, now i never heard the original so i wont spam a one like all the other douche's around here. But dude, this did lack rythm...
When you added the ''bass''(not very bassy) It was out of rythm, now stuff like that i hear with noobs, not people that are on top 30 list >.<...A good tip is to click the ''line'' option instead of ''none'' Then your bars will correctly line up with the beat and follow your chosen BPM! Maybe you did it on purpose but hell idk =P
Now for the ''point'' part i wanna say that this song consisted 90% of meaningless buildups and 10% bad beats with a VERY weak lead and bass. A good idea is to ''layer'' synths/basses, to use several sounds to make the best sound and a more custom sound than what you get when relying on one sound to do the job. The same goes for bass choice, but here i would advice you to make your own, i find the preset bass sounds out there to be incredibly weak and boring. Programs such as Rapture and Z3ta is a great first step to getting a more reliable and powerfull bass sound!
Now for the climax part, as said this song consisted 90% of meaningless buildups, meaning that they buildup to something either very weak, or just another build up, now this song did both of them, somewhere you just put build up after buildup, and somewhere you just had a very weak climax with a poor lead and bass.
When constructing a song, or even just making a song, a good idea is to see how others do it, not copy, but learn! To see how the ''pro's'' get their songs so good, and try to see how they properly construct their songs to make it better. An intro, verse, a chorus, and an outro - must have parts in a song! This song had some of them, but without them all you get a very sloppy song which is VERY hard to follow >.<
BUT, you tried, and i want to congratulate you on the top 30, even though i think it does not completely belong here, i hope it cheers you up to make better music, and gives you the attention you need for people to hear some of your better works in the future =] I hope this review helped you in some ways man!
Current Score
4.40 / 5.00 (- 0.0011)
6/10
3/5
A nice song, but lacked some rythm and some other basic faults. BUT, you tried and hopefully you learned something out of it =]
Thank you for your time.
-[ BeatSOurce ]-