pretty good, but a couple things

first off, i really loved the little panning bit for the main melody (how it'd do the melody bit, then the note in the left speaker, then the note in the right). great work on that. the percussion wasn't original, but it was pretty good.

the background pads were awful though, in that they pretty much just went from a bar or two in the beginning to the very end, aside from the little breakdowns, droning on monotonously even though it really coulda sufficed to not have them there at all. they seemed completely outside of the rest of the song, and they were mindnumbingly repetitive. i'd suggest changing those.

the little techno breakdown bits were pretty bad as well. they sounded like garageband preset loops, and they disrupted a track that otherwise had a really nice sense of rhythm and flow. it was ok sounding when the track continued on top of that synthy thing, but by itself it was really pretty bad.

the second techno breakdown was pretty bad as well-it retained that garageband preset sound, and the transition wasn't handled very well that time around either. for both breakdowns, you can't just have all the other sounds stop--there really has to be some resonance.

the track also didn't really go anywhere-the structure seemed overly simplistic (main song-breakdown-song+breakdown-breakdown-ending) and there wasn't any big buildup, and the ending wasn't great.

still, the main song part, although repetitive, was good, and went well with the percussion. it would be interesting if you redid this track keeping that melody intact-maybe varying it up a bit more-and keeping the percussion elements, leaving out those pads and the techno-y breakdowns and adding some interesting synth doodles or whatever. so a pretty good job, especially for your first in a genre.

if you get the time, check out my most recent track and leave a review, if you don't mind.

Nice and Smooth

For your first time at Hip Hop, it wasn't that bad, I actually liked it. The main beat really went well with all of the little sounds you put in there. Also the speed changes of the tempo was a nice touch. Keep up the Great Work my Friend!!!

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7/3/07

It was pretty good!

Nice job on your first hip-hop track!