hectic!

Hey, make d@b if you want to. I can see that you want to create a high energy, active track, but the downside is that its easy for things to overlap too much and sound incoherent.
For a start, the inital bass sequence is clipping, and the progression is quite strange.
The bubbly bass that follows is much more stable and could last for a tracks duration. it clashes a bit with the initial bass.
Nice effort to make some original drums, but you'll want to do some research about the two-step drum pattern. Four snares in a bar is a little bit hectic man. And the kick is lost in the mix, I dont know how many you've got in there.
So, in summary, this one needs a lot of work. But dont be as pessimistic as your song description says.