A for effort, D for performance.
Very repetitive, and the levels for the different parts are skewed.

Very nice song :33 I like the jump at 2:19 a lot. It gives the listener a feeling of surprise.

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This is really weird. The melodies are very bad and repetitive. I think you used some slide notes, but it sounds weird the way you used them. Practice with slide notes. The bass line is terrible as well (mostly because of poor sound choice). There should be chords and a sub in a drop.

Look into proper technique for build ups. The drop is really bad and the sound design is really basic.

Why are you using crashes multiple times on the same bar?? lol they are just used in between every 4 bars or so in a drop and at other specific points.

The mix is quite bad too. Notice how at 1:53, the weird bass is louder than the other pluck (the only sound that was alright in this). You have to work on levelling instruments appropriately.

You should also have hats, shakers, rides and percs in your drops. It is boring to just have a kick and crash.

I don't know how long you have been making music for, but you just need more practice and exposure to the music of experienced producers.

Keep it up. Don't be afraid to experiment.

E for effort...

It's okay, but I find the melody too repetive. Is there any chords in the background music? I don't think so (but I'm sure), so you should ad that. I also think the cymbals are way too loud, if you're gonna have loud cymbals, make the rest of the song chaotic (like Lit Fuse), or else it won't work very well. But the melody is catchy and nice so good work :D