i can hear those reeeeeeally familiar drums, it probably wasn't such a good idea to use the ones that stand there by default (fl right? :3)

beyond that i still like it, really fitting break at 2:00
melody is a bit directionless but whatever, you've learned a ton from this certainly.
so next time will be even better for sure.

and don't worry about what people will say about your music, you really need a certain ammount of "no giving a @#$%" to succeed at it :3

and just for a bit of inspiration i have to say that at your age i was still figuring out how to tie the shoe laces!

and you're already making a complete song! which is an amazing achievement by itself!