keep practising

Its cool that you're trying to make techno. This is has a few problems though. I like some of your melodic ideas but they're kind of jumbled together. The handclap is WAY too loud. You want your kick to be bigger and I cant hear any hihats.
Keep working at it.
Simplify it...all you need is a steady beat and a simple bassline, and then introduce some of those melodies one by one. Then everything will have space and everyone will love you.!