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Jul 25, 2016 | 3:25 PM EDT
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8.2 MB
4 min 28 sec
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3.68 / 5.00

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Author Comments

Okay, I doubt that this is going to make it to the final round, but here it is. May not be my best song, but I want to get this over with.

I made/recorded all samples myself, and this will also be the first time that I have ever posted song to Newgrounds with piano in it, though quite edited piano.

VSTs I used: TDR Nova by Tokyo Dawn Labs and Limiter No. 6 by VladG Sound

Made in LMMS and Audacity

Reviews


PolarTrancePolarTrance

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

I like the melody. Sound design however is not good at times, but at other times it's okay.

The melody sound that is present right from the beginning, is one of those which at first I don't like, but in some parts of the song, it feels a lot more fitting, but in other parts it again sounds not so great. Also it really sounds like default sound from a vst or something, but that might be just me.

The beats and drums you used in this song are often not so great, mainly due to sound design or mixing. That kick, sounds really muddy, and while it does have a bit of punch when it's louder, that is when it kind drowns out the other parts of the song.

After a few listens, I found out that really the best parts of the song are the ones where the drums aren't playing. So I suggest you look more in to mixing, so your drums and beats will sound more clear and better fit the song your doing.


BeeFef responds:

I admit that this isn't my best song. More than one person mentioned that kick, and I think it's not punchy enough with everything over the top of it, and it's not my favorite sample either for that reason.

Yeah, I should have put more effort into polishing the song as well as make it so that my drums are well-designed and no too loud. Drums being too loud is a problem in more than one of my songs, and I guess you would think that this isn't an exception.

I can think of even more problems than this with my songs which I'm not proud of, but thanks for the review! Helps me out a little!


TaintedLogicTaintedLogic

Rated 3 / 5 stars

I like the blissful mood at the beginning. The piece is pretty slow to progress. I would recommend varying your dynamics more to create a sense of buildup during the first minute or so. I think you needed a sweep or crash at 1:30 to smooth over that transition. The kick sounds a little indistinct at 2:29. I think you should’ve equalized and compressed it more carefully. You do very little to preempt several of your major transitory moments, such as 2:58 and 3:57. That probably means you need to do more with the phrasing and automations. I think you needed to incorporate some more dynamic contrast in here, too. Overall, this is a pretty underwhelming piece. The only moment when the melody felt as exposed as it should’ve been was 3:57. I think it would help if you went for a more legato style in your melodies that matched the atmospheric nature of this piece. Your piece also lacks an overarching sense of development. Instead, your melodies follow a very formulaic 4-bar dance pattern with little variation in the melodies themselves. I also thought your instruments sounded pretty generic and that you could’ve made the harmonies come through the mix a lot clearer at times (such as the bass at 3:13). I think you could’ve done a lot more to maximize the emotion here in general. I’d say the clarity of the low frequencies, the lack of melodic and dynamic variety, and the instrumentation need work. Otherwise, it has a lot of potential. Keep at it, man. ;)

5.5/10


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BeeFef responds:

Well, it disappoints me that I didn't make it into the final round, but I know this can help me for what I can do next time. Thanks for the review and pointing things out! Hopefully I'll do better next year.


GDNielzGDNielz

Rated 5 / 5 stars

And again it's awesome! :D
I also have got LMMS now :3


BeeFef responds:

Thanks for stopping by! Good luck on making music! There are tutorials on the LMMS website if you didn't already know ;)


1f1n1ty1f1n1ty

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Hey, BeeFef! Nice track! For this review, I'm just going to start at the beginning and spill thoughts as I go.

Right off the bat, I'm liking the composition of this first arp. Maybe the sound itself could have been more square-y or sine-y, but that's just a personal preference.

At around 0:17, I'm heard just a bit of porta/glide in those chords. Honestly, I'm not sure why you haven't done more of that to the sound! That glide effect sounds really cool, and I would have liked to hear it more. :( Also, maybe give that bass more oomph?

0:46 - That kick has a ton of low end but not enough mid/high... maybe a bad sample? Regardless, you did a good job making that kick drum sit on top of the mix! The mixing itself is actually pretty nice so far.

1:30 - I would have liked a transition into this section, but the section itself sounds pretty nice! It's mad even better by the strings/pad that get added in later, although I would have liked a less gradual attack on the sound.

Your atmosphere thus far has been pretty solid! You've used your well-designed sounds pretty well to produce a really solid mood. Good job!

Going into 3:12, I would have really liked some more contrast. Maybe use extra, more powerful sounds in this section to really give it a bigger feel than the rest of the track?

I really like these sounds at 4:00! They're just super appealing for a reason I can't really explain.

Overall, it's a nice tune with potential! Maybe a bit more variation and dynamic contrast would really help it achieve that potential!


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BeeFef responds:

Thanks for the review! First of all, the base of that first arpeggio I think is actually a waveform I drew myself in Audacity.

The more square-y or sine-y idea actually seems like it would work out fine. I could easily go and tweak it and use that sample for a future song.

Next, I admit that I should've put in more of the porta in the arpeggio throughout the song.

I'm not very good at creating drum samples, but that's not to say that won't change. The kick I used in this song was based off a sample I created last year before I was on Newgrounds.

For the next section, I personally like the dreaminess of it, and it reminds me of looking at a starry night sky. It was partially inspired by F-777.

In a review in my last song, someone said that I should do some better sound designing, and looking at this review it seems that I've improved since, which is nice knowing.

Something that I feel like I sorta need to be doing is changing it up more in my songs and making it more interesting.

The ending piano is the same sample that was from the middle of the song. It started out as a sample of a piano I have at home that I recorded on my old phone. And I agree, that part is mystical and appealing.

I really appreciate you stopping by and leaving this review. Especially from someone who's music is as good as yours.