Dawnfrost WIP

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Dawnfrost WIP

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So I finally got around to working on another song after receiving some priceless advice from Xtrullor. This is a chill DnB piece which I've been working on over the past few hours, and I think it's turning out quite nicely.

Any and all feedback is welcome. Negative is better than nothing, so fire away if you want!

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ChronoNomad

2015-11-06 23:43:06

The beat is catchy, but the deep rumbling that carries on throughout the entire track is something that would have a lot more impact if it came in later or was simply used more sparingly. Even though there's only a minute's worth of music, it quickly becomes overwhelming. The listener at least needs a break from that sort of thing from time to time, and that would also serve to make it a more dramatic effect. Bringing it in and building it up slowly from the start could also work quite well.

The string-like instrument you bring in around he halfway point (00:34) doesn't really seem to fit the overall vibe to me, but the real problem is that some of the notes are out of tune and simply don't match what's going on in the background. Also, and it may just be that there's a particularly slow attack on each note, but whatever it is that's causing it, the timing sounds off.

Hallow responds:

Thanks for the great review!
I didn't notice any deep rumbling when I re-exported it at a higher bitrate - my original three attempts to export at 128kbps had some really noticeable error with the exporting where some deep sound was just randomly appearing, but this time I didn't hear anything (which might just be my speakers). I didn't add anything deep at all so far. Do you have any idea how to fix that? Also, is that the part which you were calling overwhelming, or were you referring to something else?
About the pad coming in halfway, now that you point that out, I do notice that some of the notes don't match the chords. I'll have to fix that. As to the attack, that was partially intentional - I wanted to give it that feel - but I can fix the timing by moving the notes forward a bit.
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