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Jul 5, 2015 | 11:00 PM EDT
File Info
Song
4.1 MB
4 min 30 sec
Score
2.54 / 5.00

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Score:
Rated 2.54 / 5 stars
Plays & Downloads:
899 Plays | 52 Downloads
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Genres:
Metal, Rock - Indie
Tags:
indie
dark
light
rock

Author Comments

THIS IS A DEMO!

LYRICS:
Everybody is so distant
I wanna be less alone
No wants to be around me
I just detract all that come
Cause' it
Takes that away from me
The ability to be
It takes that away from me
And I know that I can't fix it

Lying alone on the harsh white bed
Reminds me of my family
They're always there but it's not enough
I need a friend outside them
But It
Takes that away from me
The ability to be
It takes that away from me
I'm just a freak with no connection

(CHORUS)
Crossing roads through light and dark
Converge
I don't know if what I'm feeling
Really hurts
It's all up high
Floating all around me
(SOLO)

Alienation is all I have
No one likes who I am
Trying too hard not be noticed
While I still want attention
But it
Takes that away from me
The ability to be
It takes that away from me
I don't have anyone to be with
(CHORUS)

(BUILDUP)
(BRIDGE)
Into the light source
(X8)
(SOLO through 4-8)
(CHORUS)

END

Reviews


TaintedLogicTaintedLogic

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

I like the organic, down-to-earth vibe the guitar has. There was a sort of static-y bass that came in at around :10, though, that I think detracted from that vibe a little. I like the lyrics, and the vocals are generally very good. Sometimes, it sounds a bit harsh when you hit a high note, but that might be because your peak meter is overwhelmed and/or the vocals are too loud. I would suggest equalizing the vocals a bit more on the high range if you could, or otherwise just decreasing the volume. I loved the solos around the 2-minute mark. The bass at 3:12 was hardly loud enough to hear, though. Did you try a) compressing it or b) increasing the volume in the mixer? I seriously love the 90s coffee shop sort of vibe this piece has. Reminds me of the days before auto-tune. :') This is a structurally pleasing and smooth-flowing piece, and the ending felt pretty conclusive as well. I think you just might want to try to re-record the part at 3:43. I can tell you layered some recordings there, and they cut off at different times. Still, I thought the lyrics were meaningful and relatable, and I compliment you on your extended effort during this piece (even if it was a little long), and I liked the last guitar strum at 4:25. :) Keep up the good work, Verbicidemusic. ;D

8.5/10


verbicidemusic responds:

Thanks a lot! I will definitely take that advice to heart and try to make my next pieces more sonically consistent and polished. :D Also, I had put some heavy fuzz on the bass to create a contrast between kind of a light piano lead to a heavier sounding lower end which I thought sounded cool, but I figured might not be for everyone. :P