I like the atmospheric yet robotic and ominous vibe the beginning had. I'm not sure the instrument that sounded like a vocal sample (it first comes in at :06) really works for me, though. It's kind of loud and I don't think it fits the piece well. The vocals also distort the drums a lot, a sign that your mix is not nearly as clear as it could be. The snare also gets very distorted by the bass at 1:41. The part at 2:05 served to provide some much-needed structural relief, yet its warm mood also didn't really to fit the rest of the piece that well. I'm not seeing much melodic development throughout the piece, which I think would've added a lot. The ending is also a bit sudden. It sounds like the coda got cut off mid-way through. I liked some of the isolated riffs, like the effect at :38 and the cool atmospheric bits at the beginning and end. Otherwise, it's rather slow to progress and the mixing needs a lot of work. I want you to start experimenting with Equalizers, and if you don't know what that is, please look up how to add one in whatever program you use to make your music. Compositionally, the piece is not that bad, but the mixing and some of the instruments (most notably the vocals) detract from it considerably. I also think that the transitions at 2:04 and 3:11 are a bit rough. It has potential, though. Hope this review helped. Keep working at it! ;)
5/10
Zelta 
