HAHA

maybe you should work on the guitar :D

Okay then...

Yeah. I'm not gonna lie to you; this sucked. Get an electric guitar. This is supposed to be metal, not....whatever this is.
Make it faster.
And practice for a year, then try this again.

Yeah

It was ok more practice, and get a electric guitar next time if you have one, then make it more faster. Finish the intro of it then make the last part; ok not that hard:)

First reviewer was a little frank...

First I wanna say this isn't an attack on you at all. I feel you should practice vigorously for a couple of months, then start off fresh on a new account. You have great techniqe, it just sounds very sterile. Good luck pursuing the guitar!

okay now

dude... this sucked real bad :P first of all it's too slow.... yes, you play it on an acoustic? doesn't matter, my first submissions wasn't very good either :) keep working!!! :D (i don't mean to be cruel) :)