funny that the harmonys and progressions in this piece kind of reflect your description of the story behind it. It really gives me a mellow sort of depressed and if you will ashamed feeling, so in my oppinion this would have had something to be successful in the ngadm. Then again I don't know that much about how you would have been recieved by the judges and so on. I think it's nice. Not perfect and your mixing could have been a little more expressive and open but the accentuation of the low mid still suits the vibe of the tune. Very emotional in my oppinion! You might have a talent for this kind of stuff.
Keep on going and stop being so hard on your self, this could have been great! (and it still is in some respect)