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Little piece I wrote that was inspired by The Shroud of the Avatar.
Hiya. I had a listen to your piece, here's some thoughts:
I think I could see what you were going for. The general 'sound' was nice enough, the composition is coherent, there's no terrible mistakes, but this piece is severely let down by weak progressions. There was nothing in there that I could really latch onto. Your tags say 'movie', and 'climax', so I need to be feeling the tension and then the release, the emotions. Suck me in! What is your music trying to evoke or say? What is the idea behind it?
Other issues with this track include a lack of dynamic range. It's all at the same volume, same tempo, same instrumentation. Specific example: you never let up on the rather overpowering bass, so the track never feels like it has a chance to breathe, and neither does the bass have any impact. A rather simple beginner's technique: if you're repeating a phrase, play it once with the bass-line on celli and then on its second airing double it with the double basses. It immediately gives that second repetition some more impact. Example 2: both your violin arrangements and french horn arrangements for the most part are the same rhythms again and again. Whatever about the notes, the lack of rhythmic dynamism makes the whole track feel very stodgy, lethargic and contributes to the feeling of there not really being a flowing idea and rather just 'bits'.
I think it goes without saying that perhaps with meatier samples it might've had some more impact and energy, but I personally I am at my wit's end with compositions that try to cover up weak writing with powerful samples! So I'd focus more on improving your writing, and finding your own voice than hoping an expensive sample library will turn it into Zimmer.
Keep practising, writing and uploading on here! Good luck with your future compositions.
I really appreciate you taken the time to review this work, and honestly. I actually couldn't agree with you more. It is repetitive, lacks direction and kind of falls flat in the end.
I was in a bit of a rush to just send out a sample of what I could do in a short time rather than focusing on creating a great composition. As for my writing, definitely needs improvement. I do, however, feel that when I really put my all into it I can create something remarkable.
If you've got the time check out my older track "In Search of Alice" - it has more of a journey to it.
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