This is certainly a nice track coming from a fellow new to the audio portal (welcome, btw!), but there is definitely room for some additional work. :)
I really like the sounds you use, but I as a listener want more going on- more little melody fragments, more background sounds, more little noises. Just because it's ambientish doesn't mean you can get away with just a pad and a lead. If you have time, check out the work of my friend skyewintrest, he does some really awesome stuff with ambient and electronic that is up this style.
I didn't really find the piece very catchy or super interesting. It would probably work great in a film or a game for that reason, but not so much as art music for a contest. I definitely think you could have expanded more into the soundscape and taken on some more interesting sounds. That being said, the song does feel very right for the picture. As I said, it'd be awesome as score.
The mix and actual sounds in the song were quite good sounding however, definitely a good start!
Keep compos(ed/ing)!
-Samulis
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My ratings:
Originality- 4/10
Relevance- 27/30
Composition- 10/25
Instrumentation- 8/15
Mastering- 7/10
Emotion/Interest- 4/10
Total: 60/100 (NG: 3 stars)