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i don't have anything to say about this. feedback is awesome though.
Overall, there's a lot of nice ideas in here. instrument selection is varied enough. This piece has a good, steady pace and for me I feel that it needs to go somewhere! There's some good breakdowns, one of which being (what I would describe as) Breathy which formed a part of a nice build up.
All in all, the things I mention could have more done with them. I would say that I think there needs to be more variation in here. There's that (three part, two part) two note recurring instrument which plays for too much of the track, introducing a bit more to that, some subtle variations throughout would have made it more interesting to listen to. then at around 1:34 there's a bit of a breakdown (the first of two?! or three?) This was a nice transition and it did include something different, perhaps would have been worth trying something a bit more removed from the part that came before, but you wrote the piece and this transitional element did work for the rest of what's here! I'm a stickler for variation though, even subtle ones can make for an interesting listening experience. Then, shortly after this change you revert back to what came before, which I won't fault, but again If you could have done more with that part initially, going back to it again would certainly have decreased it's overall repetition. But It's a nice piece, don't think I'm hating on it, just trying to be constructive and I hope you continue making music.
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