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this is where a nice description goes, but all really want is feedback.
Well just to check out something a little newer of yours, this perhaps would be more of a comment rather than a thorough analysis.
I actually like the sounds you have going for this-- the melody at 45 seconds in works well, and with that layered on top of your bass it creates a nice rhythm. About 3:20, you start to do a slight variation of that melody. Just want to encourage you just to go all out with varying up your melody. I feel almost like your hesitating as you're not sure if you might be moving away from the integrity of the piece if you do too much. But I could be a bit presumptuous there. Just don't put yourself in a box.
I like the melodies. Simple and chromatic, yet effective.
It's not bad at all. It's just missing something like a drive to go somewhere. It does seem a little repetitive but you have several different parts going on and it's only four and half minutes. There's enough there. Hmm I wonder...
The BPM is pretty close to 130 which is quick, but I wonder what would happen if you would increase the tempo to somewhere around 160-190. You can try having multiple tempos through your track if you like the pace of this, and I think that would help greatly.
Also, even though you have a BPM of about 130, you set the mood by having the snare play before the kick comes in which creates an illusion that the piece is at 65 BPM. Personally, because I hear the snare first, that is what lingers on my mind throughout as if that is the down beat. I wonder if that has something to do with why it seems repetitive. I would have tried reversing the roles of having the kick come in right away at the faster tempo and the snare to come in later.
I'm not exactly sure of the remedy, but it's worth a shot.
I'll give you a five to help counter that rating ;-)
i haven't been too sharp with my melodies when writing music. i just like to have a nice rhythm of weird sounds. i'm not sure why but that's just what my listening mechanisms like to hear (ears).
the reason for the snare to come in before the kick is that reason exactly. it's just something different. and yes, the snare is on the downbeat, along with the kick.
i'm not sure if making the bpm 160 would make this a house song lol it's a bit too fast for me. that's why all of my soungs are 128-140 and i have one that is 160, but it was a long time ago when i was experimenting with trap/club beats. i did actually try it at 160 to see what it sounded like. to me, it made things sound pushed together and crammed.
i'm actually working on some new stuff for this song right now. i feel like i can make it so much better. it's gonna take a while because i need to make a few new synths to go along with my others. i don't want them to sound out-of-place. i've already made a nice counter melody to go along with some of the melodies i have already. i even changed some of the melodies, only slightly, a couple of notes maybe. i even fine-tuned the kick to not sound so gross. plus i hardly even mastered this one. i just threw maximus on it, turned a few knobs and exported the mp3, didn't even make a wave file. so that's something i need to do for sure. i may even import it into audition to do some tweaking. i'm not sure yet.
It was pretty nice :D. I did though feel like it was a bit too repeative even for dance music. It's okay that the same melody play for a period of time but sometimes in your sog I felt like your song could have used some dynamic like a overlaying instrument over the lead just to give it that extra something.
I also felt like the synths sounded very flat. I think a itty tiny bit of reverb on all of them will fix that problem.
I find it wierd that your music has such a low rating actually. It certainly deserves better, but don't let the rating get you down. The most important is what people SAY about your song and I say it's good and funky :).
I liked it. I think the bass came in a little.....harsh. But then again, I'm not a heavy listener of dance music. I give it 4 stars because I can picture myself pelvic thrusting to this for 4 hours straight.
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