Nice! Thanks for taking my suggestion into consideration! (And I might add rather promptly too). I personally like this track more than the other (Fav'd, downloaded and sync'd to my tablet) But when it comes to what Moinontoi said, I realise he/she does have a point with the whole somewhat out of place instrumentals, though it had to be said for me to notice. Also I agree that you've got some fantastic ideas for melodies, it would please me to see you become one of the greater composers on NG.

+1 loyal fan

Weak production. Every single sound is so staccato, so start-and-stop. It makes it all sound campy, it makes the production feel weak. I don't get any mood or any ambience from this track whatsoever, least of all an "end of all things" kind of feel. Your drum sounds were alright and I liked the subtleties you had going on with some of the lower frequencies, but your piano sounds and that flute-y sound combined with a generic 4/4 fast-high-hats-with-a-snare-on-the-downbeat rhythm gave this the same vibe as a hastily-made dance remix of Nintendo 64 Zelda ocarina tracks. You've got some good ideas and the actual mixed levels are alright, but work on giving your sounds more variation, everything you've got here is too samey to keep it interesting. You stuck it in the "Experimental" category, don't be afraid to EXPERIMENT!