I like the feel that you've created...and i think you've achieved the "horror" atmosphere you were trying to create.
I think you could really make this more polished by fixing some of the drum parts..but i could be biased as a drummer..haha. some of the fills seem very forced and as a result they aren't natural feeling...in my opinion.
I loved the break down towards the end..it reminded me of One Winged Angel.
I enjoyed how you ended the song by cutting everything out except the bells!
If you wanted I wouldn't mind helping with the drums!
I love to come up with drum parts with people and help those who aren't drummers.
If not then thats perfectly fine too!
In the end all I really have to say is
Good Job!