Rythym shows in this one

the hits you have going on are nice enough to the song to show rythym, but kind of get annoying when you let them play by themselves.

The notes you use kind of sound... awkward with each other.

Again, the quality of this song reeks. We have a 4,000 K limit... you don't have to stay in the 2,000 region =P

You did a pretty decent job on this song. Good work!

Keep it up!