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And yet another NGAD submission. Got really sick lately, so I had to rush it in the last second : (
This is an NGADM Round 2 Review.
What I liked:
-The atmosphere was really cool.
-The chords in the beginning are quite nice, I like the bass' entrance.
- The electronic elements are subtle but effective.
-Sound quality and samples here are great!
What could have been better:
-There is no real climax, which really takes away from this piece.
-It sounds like you were really on to something and then halfway through just sort of fizzled out.
-Lack of a strong motif/theme throughout the piece.
-Where is the climax?
This is a really great piece, but you are capable of much more! It does feel a little rushed and repetitive, but you have immense potential. Keep at it!
You've got great instruments and great composition, and you definitely know what you're doing. Although this is quite the typical orchestral piece, you pulled it off quite well for that. The mixing is pretty great, and the instruments come together nicely. The melodic content is solid and the harmonies are quite decently done.
However, the piece was a bit repetitive as a whole. It doesn't really change much throughout, and while this might be acceptable considering the length of the piece, I still feel as if it could have progressed more as a track. The ending too is a bit abrupt, and the piece falls flat because of it.
Overall, a bit repetitive, but definitely a lot of potential. Keep up the good work!
-Great instruments, good intro.
-Nice main theme, nice atmosphere.
-Mixing is good.
-Barely any variation until about 1:06, and even then it doesn't change much.
-There's not much variation in this, the entire piece essentially flatlines.
-The ending sounds fairly uninspired and inconclusive.
Overall: Score of 5/10. This is extremely 'flat', and lacks much variation in the theme to boot. There's very little I can really comment on without getting nitpicky, and I don't think those are important enough right now.
This is an NGADM Round 2 review.
Aw man, sorry to hear about your illness! Hope you're feeling better now. Regarding the track, compositionally I don't feel that this is rushed. You've got some very solid composition that, to me, feels like you put a fair amount of thought into it. Your low string melody is lovely. Melodious, expressive and suitable for the theme you were going for. I like your staccato string passage at 1:06; I felt like you could've expanded the amount of notes it actually plays, but it was a good way to keep the tension levels high and at the same time provide a bit of variety from the really stretched-out melody notes that I think are characteristic of your style (based on the tracks I've heard from you at least).
With regards to production/execution, I think this is where time got the better of you. I'm not quite getting the airy and spacious mix I got from your Round 1 entry. Everything is very muddy and confined to the lower mid or low end of the track. I noticed that one of your tags is 'sci-fi', but because of all the muddiness, only after I noticed that tag (and after I curiously turned up my volume) did I recognise the bass synth playing in the background, which really shows that your mix leaves much to be desired. Your strings also feel a little stale and unchanging in volume. 1:32 was a pretty bad transition, and from then on we're not treated to much new content, as ChronoNomad pointed out.
This track needs more changes in texture. The melody is never carried by an instrument which isn't strings. Really, all I'm managing to hear are strings, percussion, the bass synth, and maybe some super subtle woodwinds which might just be my mind tricking me. Not only that, but the strings only ever stay in their lower register, which only adds to the aforementioned dynamically stale issue that they have. This lack of instrumentation might've been because you were sick, since your Round 1 track didn't have this problem!
Overall, it does sound a bit rushed; shame that things happened how they did. You're an excellent composer regardless (you've got to be, considering you beat PeterSatera!). Good luck in your future tracks, and if you're still unwell, get well soon!
That was beautiful
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