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Originally started as two different pieces but then I realized they'd sound real good back-to-back and then this was made, so enjoy.
This was a very good experiment. One thing to consider: according to your tags this is supposed to be a calm, relaxing piece, and yet there are quite a few things that detract from this mood.
1) The highly staccato nature of this piece combined with the four on the floor bass drum creates a tension that desires movement. This is okay in small bursts in a relaxing piece so long as that tension is released, otherwise there will be no chance to relax.
2) In the intro you created a high amount of tension with the bass line motif F-G#-A-G#-F. This is because the second G#, which acts as a secondary leading tone going to A, does not resolve.
3) Going off of #2, there is very little resolution in this piece. This means that you introduce clusters of notes or notes that do not belong in a chord, but you do not allow them to release the tension by resolving.
All of these things said, if you had intended to create a piece that was meant to create an offsetting atmosphere rather than a relaxing one, you did a good job. However, your tags lead me to suspect otherwise.
Ok, I really liked the jazzy piano riff, but by 00:40 I had a mixed opinion.
And then! the little synth panned left entered, and I started to really like everything.
I like the harmonic complexity! It's a bit like what Animals as Leaders would sound if they moved from heavy metal to indie electronic.
The mastering is ok. The ideas thrown in are nice.
BUT the bass is annoying! In both pieces... I'd suggest trying different masterings for it, different EQs or something. It really hits my ears like nails, and it's a shame, both ideas are sooo good!
In retrospect, I absolutely love the first piece, the second one is ok. Not as complex as the first, and that's what I really liked about the first. It's exactly what it's supposed to be, it's true to itself, and that I wholly appreciate!
6 stars for the first, 4 for the second, average is 5 stars, lol.
Hmm... So my original thoughts are "What is this?" and "Is this going in Reverse?". Both of those seem plausible. I do like the change of pace and theme 2 minutes in.
Possibly one the biggest pluses on this, I believe is the uniqueness of the tune. But I suppose by combining two different pieces you were working on can do that can it not?
As for flaws... I noticed that the piece after about 3 minutes in became quite repetitive... try to stay away from that, or maybe make use of it. An example of making use of repetition, would be to take a catchy tune you already used to refresh the tune back into what you were doing... this eludes the listener from what actually is repetition... however don't get to careless with that.
Overall I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Fantastic work... keep making more music!
I give you 4.5 stars out of 5. Great work!
Seems like a great song that's been twisted into chaos. Regarding 'part 1', I love all of the instruments you chose and their presence in the song, however it sounds like you didn't quite know where to place the notes. Around 1:10, everything seems to come together a bit better, but overall it is quite dissonant and nearly brings me to closing the window. It does seem to keep my from doing that, though. You are for sure onto something; just keep working on harmonizing and whatnot.
As for 'part 2', it fits the bill as far as what you have declared by the title. It's together much better than the first part and still has the great choice of instrumentation.
I feel like with some more practice, you will be making gold tracks. For now you should work on harmonizing and reducing the dissonance in your tracks (albeit dissonance CAN be a good thing... at times). Most of this is completely based on my outlook on music, so you may choose to ignore it. Just keep producing buddy!
Hmm, I can understand why you wouldn't like the dissonance but it was pretty much intentional for the first 1:07, although the part at 0:44 I was pretty iffy on. But those chords were supposed to be dissonant and bring a jazzy type feel with the instruments around it giving it a contrast feel. After the first 1:07 I feel like I got rid of the dissonant feel, but eh.
I do appreciate your review though, and I will take it all into account. Sometimes its better to do things in lesser amounts. Thank you a lot for your kind words.
I like your idea here.
I would drop the bass volume to zero everytime the "ghost-strings" hit in the backgrounds. It would give them more "powah", if you follow me. I would also swap intruments occasionally if the melody stays the same for a long period (but this is a matter of artistic view, I don't want to come out like I know better than you! Just think about it ok?)
I liked the part one better. It keeps the interest for a very long time. And like I said first, the idea here is awesome. Keep up the good work! :)
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