Nice!! I like this!
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This is my entry for the a.i.m. audio contest 2012 based on Captain Carrion's work.
Really interesting rhythmic interplay you have going on here. I'm counting this as being in 5/4, or at least some sort of asymmetrical meter. Is that right? If it is in 5, I like how the snare accents an unusual pattern with syncopation. I've never heard 5 being played out quite like that. Kudos on the rhythmic originality!
That said, here are some other opinions.
-The choir(?) could come up in volume. I think it adds a nice color to the texture and would like to hear it more clearly.
-As a whole, I think this piece would benefit from more dynamics and careful velocity editing. The part starting around 1:24 feels particularly robotic, with every single hit sounding the exact same in terms of loudness. It's a cool idea rhythmically, but it sound so mechanical to me that it is unpleasant. I have a hard time distinguishing the beat pattern.
-I liked the ending very much except for the gong(?) at the very end.
Some good ideas here, but they could be executed a little better. Keep 'em coming! :)
SourJovis responds:
Thanks! It's indeed a 5/4 meter.
I finished this right before the deadline, so I thought I wasn't allowed to make any edits after that. I have made a new version though that I've uploaded as a loop. It doesn't have the gong as an ending, I didn't like that too much either. Works better as a loop. the part starting at 1:24 also has some more velocity variation. Could do with a bit more variation I guess. I can improve more on the new version. I'll take into account the things you've said. Increase the choir in volume. I think I'll add a piano and a harp as well. Thanks for the advice.
I love the melody played by the violins, it fits very well and come in very nicely. The drums ostinato is very powerfull to. The ending is very cool to. Very cool piece!
SourJovis responds:
Thank you! I appreciate the comment!
Very interesting work. Looking forward for more similar works to this.
SourJovis responds:
Thank you. I think I will make something similar to this one day. Or that depends how you describe similar, because I try to do something different every time. I will always make music the way my mind thinks it should be, so I will eventually make something like this. I guess.
I couldn't stop thinking of an army marching to war to this song. I guess the drums helped me with that.
Very well done and good luck for the competition!
SourJovis responds:
Or heroes flying towards a floating island in a zeppelin. Thanks. A lot of good stuff in the competition. Good luck to you as well. (I can say that because there can be 14-18 winners)
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