Good effort in this song, but there a couple of things that could use improvement.
One is the buildup you have at the beginning of the track. It goes on for like a minute. You probably would have lost the interest your audience by then. You can cut that intro to 20-30 seconds and get to the point.
Another thing is that the whole track seems to stay in it's comfort zone and with all of that previous build up you have, we were expecting more of a kick to it. It just feels like you didn't take it to the max, the track just stayed where it felt like it belonged. Working with your octaves could help as well as a moving part to help move the track along.
Good effort. Congrats on producing your first track. Keep at it man!

Too much build-up for my tastes, I find myself trying to find the soul of your song in this track. Production quality is good man, enough for the 4-stars alone, but it feels sort of hollow to me, and I don't mean sound-wise.

Keep it up though, find the soul for your songs, and I'll scout you.