Add a lil percussion in between the drum pattern you already have set, turn up those drums, make the kick a little deeper, and this'll be really dope. VERY nice for a first song.

Very cool! It does sound like it's missing something, and a bit repetitive, but not a bad start! I look forward to hearing what else you have to offer.

its good and i like the deep sound with the soft short sound on top of it but it seems to me to be missing its oomph ..... this is dark maby some deep pipe organ or somthing "spooky" lightly in there
try it out just my opinion though

awesome job man keep it up