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This is my entry for round 1 of NGDAM! I'm glad this competition had me writing music. I may add a few more vocal parts later, but deadlines. teehee~
Edit: Wow, thanks for the frontpage exposure NG!
Edit 2: Updated mix! No more bass drum problems <:
From the doubt in our cortex
Rationale is attained;
Repose keeps us afraid
But fear is the chemical gluing our vigilance together
Reason lets us thrive
Use the spectrum in your eyes
From a callow soul comes courage
No God to guide me through this, my nerves quiver steadily, but that means I am free
Now, no longer hollow, but still, I'm just a formula
Oh, our hearts are led astray, but that's okay, for we are just chemicals
Our souls may stay as shallow ponds, but nothing's wrong; we are the universe
This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.
Alright, I'll give it to you straight. This is amazing. I've never heard of you before the NGADM so for me you honestly came out of nowhere and started posting this amazing stuff like magic or something. You're brilliant, I have honestly never heard anyone so good at this genre for a long while. Fantastic work.
So, yeah, everything is amazing. I love your guitar playing so much, you're a very talented guitarist. The quick descending and ascending phrases you do on the guitar all over the song are just sublime and you integrate them so well with your melody. You've clearly got a good grasp of music theory too because some of your chords are just phenomenal (I especially like the one at 1:10). All of the instruments you used are just so good. They fit with each other wonderfully.
Transitions are even fantastic. You had tons of sweet drum fills and even some awesome melodic fills (like BlazingDragon said, the chromatic phrase at 1:32 is out of this world). I love how you seamlessly transition from one mood to another so easily. Examples include the transition at 1:36 where you switch to a more playful mood very well, and 4:22 where you switch from the busier part to the softer part.
Mixing is also extremely good, but unfortunately it's not perfect. The drums in particular feel a bit too dosed in high-end reverb. Also, they feel too compressed around 5:07. The open hat later on sounds a bit too loud too. Lastly, the vocals seem a bit awkwardly mixed in and sound strange at times. Your voice is REALLY good and in-tune, but sometimes they get drowned out, other times (1:47 for example) they stand out too much and sound pretty odd.
Anyway, that's all I have to say about the track. It's sublime, let me know when you get a record deal k thx.
Thank you Step! I'm happy my sound is well received!
I'm also glad my transitions work! I feel like I struggle the most trying to write them, since I do more chord progressions than riffs.
I'm glad the problems here lie in the mixing! All it takes is opening up the DAW and your helpful reviews side-by-side to get a good mix going. I really appreciate the constructiveness, I'm sure it will help in the next round too!
Thank you for the great score, great review, and great help!
There is virtually nothing wrong with this song. It's truly near perfection, and I can say without a doubt that you are the winner of the first round.
wow you sound like a freaking insane beast on the guitar. You need to be on guitarwars or something lol.
Fuck 5 stars this gets 100 stars! Awesome stuff dude! Your writiing/mixing/playing/singing is coming along great keep it up!!! \m/
Thanks MJ! I always appreciate your responses and I'm always super jelly of your fast fingers. :c
Fantastic mixing, playing, everything. The piece is dynamic, contrasting, and full of great transitions. This is great material.
I LOVE the progressions you use. The chromatically descending bassline at 1:36 is super catchy. I love the minor dominant 3:39. The chord after that was totally unexpected but worked very well. You really make great use of altered chords.
And the vocal work is awesome. I don't find that much on NG.
I don't have much to say except that I love this piece. I feel so swept away as I listen to it. The jazz influence is what makes it so incredible for me. It's so fresh. So...not cliche. Fantastic craftsmanship here.
Do you know much music theory or are you just doing this by ear?
Thanks for the review! I updated the track, it sounds better and has a few more vocal parts. But it's the same idea.
THANK YOU for recognizing theory! Yeah, my rule is: when in doubt, go chromatic LOL. The minor dominant is my favorite modulation, I'm afraid to waste it because I think I have two or three other songs where I do it. It's such a good feeling in the stomach to hear. I have to cut it out and not spoil the magic.
I know chord theory and enough scales to move around in chords, but I can't sightread super fast. I have to sit down with sheet music for a long time to get it right. I appreciate the detail in your review,, thank you! I need to hear what you have in store. :>
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