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This is my first round of the Audio Deathmatch, up against Open Light who has made an awesome track! So good luck to him (or her) and I hope you enjoy!
Obviously it's been made in a (really) short amount of time but I quite like it :)
I put it under dubstep 'cause of the tempo
This song felt underdeveloped in the whole, although the use of piano was very interesting.
For starters... I really liked the piano in this song... it was very beautiful, and I thought well composed. I was also quite fond of the "slidy synth" that came in around around the 2 min mark, thought that was a cool addition to what you had running before that.
However... This song suffers from a really, really bad case of repetitiveness... the piano part may be pretty, but it's repeated pretty much identically throughout the entire song. The only real variations in the song were brought about by how the beat changed, and that wasn't really enough to keep me interested. And while I liked the slide synth... I think it was a bit too quiet.
If this had been a backing track to a movie or something, I think it'd work great, but on its own, it really needs to go somewhere instead of repeating the same melody throughout the entire song.
So yeah... I really liked the idea behind this one... but the ridiculously repetitive nature of it really hurt the score I gave it. 5/10.
This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.
Man, I'm afraid I'm not too much of a fan of this one. I remember being a fan of some of your really early works but this feels like one of your worse submissions IMO. I mean you have some good melodic ideas, but the whole thing sounds too bland and flat.
I'll have to say that I like your melody. It's unique but not too complicated; memorable but not too simple. Pretty cool chords too, but nothing ground-breaking. You've got some very good transitions too and everything flows smoothly (loving the transition at 2:17). Structure-wise it's good too, even if it is a bit predictable. Yeah, you've done a pretty good job with the composition here, I can't complain much. You've got a solid mix too.
However, the problems start in the instrumentation. You've got just a piano, synth and drums, and since you repeat the melody a LOT and keep the synth doing its own thing in the background instead of bringing it out more, this can get very uninteresting. The fact that the track isn't very intricate at all also makes it sound bland and flat. I applaud you for trying something new, I've never heard of this instrument combination before, but I'm afraid it doesn't work. I want pads, effects, arps, a bass... anything to break up the monotony and blandness of the track. You need more instruments. What makes the track even more flat is the fact that you really don't go the extra mile to add some dynamics, intricacy and/or realism to your piano. Vary those velocities more!
To add onto that, your intro and outro are also too plain. The intro, in particular, is really nothing special. Give it something more than just a chord fading in. It was a good idea to end the track fading a chord out since it rounds the track up nicely, but the ending note itself isn't very satisfying at all. You need to create a more noticeable approach to the ending note, rather than just ending it like that.
Overall, this isn't one of your best I'm afraid. It sounds too bland, even though it's got some pretty strong compositional aspects.
Here is your personal review for your round 1 submission! Remember that the score might be a little lower than I would normally give, I'm being a tad harsher than I'd normally be for the NGADM.
-You have some nice harmonies in there with the piano.
-I like the instrument that comes in at around 1:52-2:17.
-First giant thing. That intro. I'm sorry, it's pretty crappy. As a pianist, it hurt to hear that extremely robotic piano banging. It would have been slightly better if instead of fading in the volume, you faded in the velocity, but it really could use some more effort overall.
-Actually, to tell the truth, it would have been great if you changed the velocity on the piano at some point, period.
-The bass is a bit too big and 'blobby'in the middle.
-There's not really any variation, and the song just sounds like it's flatlining the whole way through. :(
Overall: I'm REALLY disappointed. I've heard some of your other music, and it was way better than this. You could have done way better, even for a short amount of time. I give it a 4/10.
First off (I'm posting this to everyone): Note that the scores might be a bit lower than what's typical for NG reviews - no one should expect a 10/10 unless their entry was absolutely incredible.
The first thing that hits me is that the piano is really, truly synthetic and lifeless. That is of course very noticeable when it's the only instrument currently playing. At points it's almost humorous to note how ridiculously hard you would have to press the keys to actually play the piano with such vigor that it creates the sound of the piano in this song. It's also heavily quantized, which only emphasizes the "obviously programmed" feel of the instrument. Beyond the basic chords, there are a few faster runs - which are a nice addition, but the problems above remain for those as well.
The drums hit hard enough - the kick has sufficient bottom end as well as midrange punch. The snare is nicely layered too. The way the hats are panned out is a nice touch, but it's panned so hard that it gets disorienting through headphones (though it sounds just fine on speakers). The cymbals are a bit quiet, but otherwise fine. None of the samples are anything out of the ordinary, neither is any of the programming.
I'm hearing very little other stuff to really point out. The only remaining instruments are a kind of bland synth sound that emphasizes the drum beat, and a bass synth that occasionally plays the root note. You give the listener the primary musical idea early on and never really stray from it or try to impress, so it does get a bit boring even within the first listen.
The few instruments that are present in the mix are mixed well, as every detail can be heard and no single instrument drowns in the shadow of another. So kudos for that, even if it's not a particularly hard feat with 3 instruments and a drum kit. The overall sound is airy but usually a bit lackluster since the bass synth is rarely present.
6 points for sounds and instrumentation.
5 points for composition and melody/harmony.
3 points for theme/originality/other things that might impress.
Overall impression: 5.0
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