I feel like the one thing that was keepin this from a 5 star were the patches. A lotta ppl on NG are really good about synth creation. I feel like this same melody with better patches would take this song to the nxt lvl.
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This song is based off of a poem that I read. It is of a heart being ripped away, then replaced by one of mechanical nature. I love how this turned out. Comments and criticisms welcome.
BuddyBlueBomber responds:
I can honestly say I don't know what patches are. But thank you for your input, the synth certainly needs some work.
This is good, if you keep practicing and work at it more, produce some more stuff, and have some fun doing so you can produce some really good high quality music. Here are my criticisms.
-It feels like it is dragging at the beginning
-I feel like the melody wasn't strong enough, but that's just my opinion.
-I feel like at times it goes off beat with the synth and the beat, so it feels like the synth is dragging
Overall it is pretty good for your fist submission [not dissing it based on the fact it is your first submission], I hope to hear more.
BuddyBlueBomber responds:
I feel like the synth is something I'm going to have to look back on and polish the most, with as much feedback as I'm getting. I will possibly change it around more to make the first half of the song seem less monotonous. Thanks for the honest input.
You have great ideas in this piece. Yet it's rather rough as it doesn't quite fit the ambient genre with so strong melody.
+overall feeling
+parts 0:53-01:09 and 01:39-01:52, good ideas but as said, bit rough on the edges :)
-first minute feels bit dragging, maybe a slight variation to the basic melody would keep it fresh
till the first transition?
-Rough on the edges, but easily fixed
3 stars from me, keep working on it! :)
BuddyBlueBomber responds:
I've had quite a few people tell me that it felt "rough," or that it was "missing something." I appreciate the help, but I feel like I'm not at the appropriate skill level as of yet to do much about what I have so far. Maybe in the future I shall improve on this idea. I am glad you pointed out some specific areas, though. Thank you for the comment.
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