Sunra - Atonement
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My third track! I've taken as much criticism as I could and tried to rap this one together as well as possible. I know it's a bit of a broken record but this one is about suicide, particularly a guy who left behind his whole family and network of friends. It's a real occurrence and a relevant issue, I hope you guys can appreciate that.
Wyze Stingray from HDC on the beat. Mad props to him. http://www.wyze-stingray .com
Feedback greatly appreciated, I tried to use more multi-syllable rhymes, and tried to make the hook less "sing"-y because... well... I can't sing.
Enjoy, rate + review!
(And yes, the hook is a tribute to Rage.)
EDIT: #1 on Oldskool when I checked in today and Best of the Week! Thank you guys so much for your support, I'm so excited to get some more exposure, please keep the criticism coming so I can improve!
EDIT2: DAMN the 0-bombs were hard on this one once it hit the front page of the portal! Haters gonna' hate >-< Keep reviewing though, I love to hear from you guys.
Reviews
Rated 5 / 5 stars December 25, 2011
awesome
I thought it was awesome I think you need put more umpf in your voice though. other that that, great beat I like the lyrics. I think this if rated to low
Real glad you liked it! It got 0-bombed really hard but yeah. I'm still working on putting more emotion into my voice, stay tuned for more!
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars December 19, 2011
Chill out!
it's not the awesomnest on world..but has a nice sweet flow.
Better than modern shit though, not perfect but smooth.
keep it real!
Thanks man! Fuck modern hip-POP! I'm real glad you dig it, appreciate the support.
Rated 3.5 / 5 stars December 19, 2011
In this track I hear so much potential...
Beat was good, lyrics were good.
Yet here and there:
-You're speaking more than rapping. There's a slight lyrical edge that's missing. Even though it's rap don't forget you're still technically singing. I know, you think you can't sing. Just because you can't sing one way doesn't mean your voice can't have force and clarity in another. You don't want you voice to sound flat, whether you're speaking or singing. Think about how you express your emotions when you're intensely agitated. Experiment with your voice! Singing is a skill that can be honed.
-You're using some lines that seem forced, trite, unnatural. Don't hesitate when it comes to being yourself!
-Cursing shouldn't ever feel unnecessary. Use it to give emphasis at the end of a line rather than using a swear word to take up beats.
-You're lines are intellectual. That's a strength. Don't ever make your lyrics lowbrow if you don't want to.
thanks for the music, which I thoroughly enjoyed.
Not really sure what you mean about the swearing, I use it as I see fit emotionally. I'm still working on the tone in my voice, if you check out my new songs I've improved quite a bit on that. Glad you enjoyed it!
Rated 5 / 5 stars December 16, 2011
Its good to hear some hip hop that has a purpose
I get the point your were making and you hit it very well
I did a similar type of art but i took it to t-shirt designs. Just hearing this reminds me all of the research i did for the t-shirts
Dope man! I'm really glad you liked it, it's cool you're doing that shit too, people don't learn enough. Ignorance is a killer, that's why I think it's important to get this kinda' stuff out there
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars December 15, 2011
Niiiice
You're really good at rapping,the whole thing flows really smoothly...
Oh and also the lyrics are amazing along with the beat.
Great work man,can't wait to hear more.
Thanks! I'm really new, and my equipment isn't great, so I hope I can surprise you some better quality stuff in the near future as I improve. I'm really glad you liked it.