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Date
12/03/2011
File Info
Song
2.3 MB
1 min 1 sec
Score
4.26 / 5.00

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Author Comments

So I was getting bored with my college homework, I put up Fruitlyloop and got this.

Battle song. I got inspiration from US Civil War...

Sorrow and heroic moods. Sorry for the ending because I ran out of ideas. Still WIP.

I need criticism badly. Thanks!

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samulissamulis

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Conflagration

Some constructive criticism for you-

I think a melody needs to come out a bit earlier and clearer... much of it is a mix of instruments playing variations of the original motif and variations on it. Quite honestly, it's a glorious piece without its horns (no pun intended). You really should consider having someone come in with a solid melody near the end at least (41)... perhaps a quarter-note 5th, then a dotted-half 8th, then a quarter-note 5th 8va, then a dotted-half 8th... it's simple but gives a great "Royal" feel. Alternately, consider some piccolo/fife (if you have any Virtual Instruments of a fife) playing some stuff with the high violins given the historical theme of the song. A snare part and a steady quarter or half-note bass drum hit would be in order, I think.

In the ~30 area, I think some double-bass should come in with pizzicato quarter-notes on the tonic. Be careful with reverb with that if you do, though.

At the end, I imagine a solo 8va of the 2th on the strings or flute after a rest with a fermata (i.e. have a short pause). After four beats of that, low-brass or something comes in with a low chord with the tonic, dismissing that last note and a nice crecendo and the melody comes back in another form. Alternately, don't be afraid of a key change or of a complete turn in mood or even key... if you want to think about a battle, you'll need a beginning, a middle, and an end. I think you have a good beginning, and the very start of the middle (I think the Overture of 1812 has the right idea with the echoing motifs going back and forth, almost fighting), but no sort of pure climax of utter chaos- remember, war is hell... Sherman (or was it Grant?) said that during the Civil War. I think some nice dissonance would be nice with all sorts of clusters, even glissandos if you can do them. Don't be afraid to experiment and go out of normal bounds with war themes... war doesn't have bounds and nor should music about it. ;)

I think the pizzicato notes should be a bit louder in the beginning... they seem a bit covered up.

The song is in general, excellent... but I feel there's more to the story. Good luck, story teller. ;)

-Samulis


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dem0lecule responds:

Hey man, thanks for the constructive criticism. Sorry for the late response.

I'm working hard on remaking this song (re-make is not a right term lol, I'm not even finish it. Screw that) based off what you have said.

I zip my lips now and listen for instruction since my orchestra knowledge is worse than a grade 12 music student.

AI shall send you another PM when it is done.


SpaceWhaleSpaceWhale

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Really good, and realistic, too!

I loved the sound of this! The instruments all went together flawlessly, and I couldn't for the life of me find a mistake in this that made it sound fake. Not much else to say!

(From the WIPs thread)


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dem0lecule responds:

Thank you for the review a lot. But I keep running out of right idea to continue on this. Dang.


Druids-WarcryDruids-Warcry

Rated 5 / 5 stars

really good

far better then any thing classical i have ever done on FL bravo sir this is magic


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dem0lecule responds:

Thanks.

I think the DAW doesn't matter tho, it's the instruments and mastering. Although I used quite a bunch of filters in FL Studio for this.