you sir

have talent

slick production - nice track

i dig the overall feel to this - definately a solid mix of rap/industrial. the drums/bass locked together rhythmically and texturally. the gun sound effect was a little bit cheesy, but it at least wasn't overdone and drowning out. the melodies captured the mood that the drums and bass laid out, really giving a solid feel to the song overall.

it lacked a little bit in movement and defining melody, however. i tend to have similiar problems in my song. even in ambient or rap music there has to be some sort of defining melody or rhythm that you really think of when you hear the name of the song - and this didn't quite have it. i gave you an 8 simply because there is room for improvement here, but this is a great start. just keep workin on music and keep the tunes comin.