lol oops
dident know you added more before i made the last review, but i still think it needs a few more layers to add intensity, and, as i said before, it needs a climax. the listener always wants a point in a song to look forward to. the problem is, if there is no major climax in a song, there is nothing for the listner to look forward to, and that can frustrate the listner. i hope you add a bit more to this but that isnt my disition, thats up to you. read this over and consider it.
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