not that I really need to say this, but...
I know everyone's already thinking this, but after the quarter rest at bar 6, you should have returned with a high tom progression, supported by the bass drum, which would lead to increasing the songs over all composition. I understand, it's an easy thing to miss! Good work with the dramatic silence at the end, really does tie in the 'mood' of the piece, keep up the good work!
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T_T I just listened to something with over 10 hours of work put into it, and it had half the score this... thing does.
we all have to start somewhere, some more dignified than others.
+*. Special Ed .*+