Needs an offbeat bass!
This was good, nice synth work! But you really need to add a bassline (kick doesn't count) It sounds very dry without bass. Work more on the beat (perhaps get some good drum sample packs) , the snare you used was not so pleasant... And well, make more melody variations, it was very repetitive. Except for the things I mentioned I liked most of it. :) You have potential!
- Xtas