This reminds me of something...

I don't really want to say this, but these songs sound like my first attempts at music 3 years ago... I can see that you're experimenting and trying to get a feel for composing, which is great. This song has an EXTREMELY random structure and the synthesizers are very harsh. Really the only advice anyone can give you at this stage is to spend time practicing and try to push yourself to write better songs. I spent about 8 hours a day for almost 2 years to get to the point where I am now musically. Just try to write songs you would like to listen to, like while you're driving or something... Or it might help if you write songs for someone you know. Find whatever works to raise your standards so you keep getting better!