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Hello! This is my first submission ever to Newgrounds, and I'm nervous as hell.
I'm a huge rookie, but I hope I could get some critiques from you guys.

This song is probably the first piece that I have ever actually "Finished" and I'm quite proud of it.

I used FL Studio 8.

This is a completely original piece that I made in about 2 hours.

Thanks for listening!

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MrMusicalLion

2011-06-24 15:34:10

Worth a listen :)

Hey, this piece has some interesting stuff to it.
I really liked the change at about 00:53. From there, things got more interesting, definitely.

I think the intro should be worked on a bit, it's a bit sporadic and the piano would sound better if you varied the melody a bit more.

I gave you a 7 because I feel that this was worth listening too but at the same time there is a lot of room for improvement, I think. I don't make this specific style of music myself but I am a pianist and I make piano compositions/improvs and the piano in this would sound a lot better if you developed the melody more.
If you want any ideas how that can be done, message me and I'll try and record a few variations of what could have been done with the melody :) Or have a listen to some of my piano stuff and see how I develop melodies.

GoodLuck =]

aboynamedearth responds:

Thank you for the review! I never really gave the intro much thought. I've always had a difficult time introducing pieces, because I have so much fun with the meat of the songs, you know? I would definitely love to hear what you'd change as well.