My first impression...
...is that zero bombers really don't like you, man. We'll have to work on fixing the damage that they've done here because this is a pretty solid piece of music.
After reading Xenophaje's review and your subsequent comments, I definitely have to agree that this would make a really great boss loop! The one thing that really stands out for me is your use of stereo channels...a little thing I like to call "stereocity". This track's got it in spades, and it sounds excellent!
On the downside, I'm not really liking how 'in your face' that snare is compared to the rest of the percussion. At first I thought it was the snare itself that I didn't like, but I think it's actually just the volume of it that I find to be off-putting in most instances. When there's lots of snare it feels especially overwhelming, but hey...that's just me. :)
Overall, I really dig the mix you've got here, and I was really disappointed to see that it had a score of like .9 when I arrived! You deserve better than that, and I'm going to do what I can to see that it happens. Respect.