not bad

however a big problem i have with it is, the arpegiated bell; it moves to high in the register, and really distracts me with the high piercing notes. the strings are also on there own they have there own melody. ( but the string is really neat) i think the big part that loses focus on this is the bell, it gives a false harmony, as a matter of fact so does the strings match the tones of both and they will compliment each other. i must say though i do like the drums really well done just the two separate melody's are not working together. THIS DEFINETLLY HAS POTENTIAL. i am looking forward to a finished version. this is also well compressed :)

Nice!

I was a little confused by those rising lines in the beginning, they don't really line up with the orchestral lines very well. But! As soon as 0:34 came around they fit perfect! They had a good tight mix between tension and resolution! I'm not a big fan of the 'candy' sounding lines if you know what I mean, but it was executed fairly well! The beat gets a little redundant over the course of the song though. I'd try switching it up a little bit, maybe creating a whole new section that illustrates a bea shift and then layers that over the song, but i'm not exactly sure how that would work out.

Anyways, check this out, Omni Trio has always been my reference for what good DnB is. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0_2AnU F7WFI&feature=related

Hope this helped!

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I think this could be a winner
put in more drum and bass
it starts out nice at 1 minute 36 seconds add more drum and bass
make the drums the predominating part of this audio
keep em coming