I love this
I give it some respect.
Author Comments
Hello. This is my first submission to Newgrounds. As stated in the title, it is a work in progress. I can already hear some things that are wrong with it. So please, if you can, go easy on it. It's pretty divergent for me so I'd like to not only hear the bad things, but the good things about it, too.
The song is a six-minute electronic piece comprised of lots of different sections and emotions, and I've poured lots of time into it so far. I hope with the help of reviewers I'll be able to make it better.
Thanks,
ochrence
YouTube video for this song (not much of a video at all, actually): http://www.youtube.com/wa tch?v=4KgLAdcjClk
Nice atmosphere
Nice buildup to 0:34, but I feel as though the loop continuing to 1:01 should have ended at 0:54 , the sound that appears at 1:02 I feel has too much reverb and I wish there was a clearer sound overtop. 2:31 is a cool part of the song. Great atmosphere at 3:40. Overall I felt like the song was too fast paced (which I guess is what techno is) but I feel as though it would have been nicer to hear notes held for longer and more spaced out, something simple to hold the song together. Anyway, my two cents, looking forward to hearing your new stuff!
ochrence responds:
So you felt that too much was happening too fast? Yeah, I guess I tried to fit about three thousand little chord progressions and sections into the song. I'll work on removing those extra ones or making them subtle or something. I'll try to work on notes being held longer, too.
The 1:02 sound definitely has too much reverb. It bothers me very much. Fixing that will be my main goal, because that moment is supposed to be one of the peaks, the most exciting parts of the song.
Thanks for a great review!
-Ochrence
This Honestly isn't that bad :)
Yes, it needs work. Sounds like you need some more tedious work with your compressor (I know it's horribly time consuming. it's a necessary evil). Not that it's hard to tell what the melody is, but maybe use a different style of a lead, I'm assuming it's that wonderful high feeling bell tone thing. Right now, I'm at 2:12, and I'm liking what I've heard. Ummm, 6 minutes and 14 seconds? You should try to make a more fluent song. I don't exactly what I want to say. I know what I mean, but I don't know how to say it. Great song overall! Listen to it over and over and write down what you feel, and go back into FL Studio or Ableton or whatever you use, and make those changes, and repost it. I'm going to favorite you just so I can hear the progress. I'm super excited for what this will become. Keep makin music bro!
btw, maybe check out a couple of my songs :D
ochrence responds:
When you say "fluent", are you saying that the song is too long, or that it's too disjointed?
I have grown to hate that lead, because it behaves the way I want it to only when it's not as important that it does. I know that I'll definitely change some stuff up with stand the compresser. Something that especially bothers me is that the rather detuned lead, the one that continues alone until the end, is too loud in the second and third choruses. That will also be fixed.
Thank you for your kind review!
-Ochrence
And I will check out your music.
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