I haven't heard the original...
So this is a review just off what I hear, minus composition.
The instrumentation is good, but the initial bass drums need... IDK, they need focused a bit. As it is, they start out as just a dull throb, and they don't seem to move past that.
The rest of the instrumentation is good. The into was good, and the transitions are all doing fine so far. I agreed that you should continue this. And, I think it's time I listen to the original... :P
Keep it up man!
~Sir_Furious