This is a very melancholic song and the background story is very moving.
I like the flow of the song. The melody is very nice and it puts the listener in a thoughtful and melancholic mood. Only thing I would've done differently is the ending. I think you should end it on a lower chord. Just leave everything as it is right now, just add a low chord at the end. In my opinion, this would really put an emphasize on the "taking their last breath" part of the story.
But this is just a minor thought, because the song does work really well as it is now.
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