A few things...

The song was alright but your beats consisted of two main note lines. When I make a song I try and make the lead at least 4 main note lines, that way theres more diveristy and time to do other things. Another thing I noticed is that there was no real flow or sticking with a consistant bassline, a few moments in the song were fairly random and didnt go well with the song. However, I think if u work on more diverse and elongated patterns, you could actually be quite good. Well, good luck

-Echo-