By my own rules.....

I have to be honest. I don't like it it's got way to much of an 4-bit attari sound, try something a little less gritty. tweak the relay on your synths and mess with the cutoff ressonance youll get some sweeter sounds.
I just think there is to much discord here.

MMMmm.... Low end YUMMY.....

This still needs a backbone, though. A straight pulse bass is your friend, and stutter snare rolls add new depth to your builds.