It's a start. You're on your right foot.

I agree with "Fastmekillyou" vocals, can be better, you're only slightly out of tune, only on a couple of of phrases. I'd personally suggest, take a lot of air for the vocals. And Try to drag on the melody a little longer, you're doing staccato, and you can song more like Elliott Smith if you hold your note longers.

Also, there's also some clipping of the guitar.

Either way, good start.
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pretty good, keep it up, practice vocals more, drink lots of room temp. water! make sure your throat is clear. other than a SLIGHT vocal sound, it's great. KEEP TRYING!