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May 6, 2010 | 4:07 AM EDT
File Info
Song
4.1 MB
3 min 0 sec
Score
3.01 / 5.00

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Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.

Score:
Rated 3.01 / 5 stars
Plays & Downloads:
494 Plays | 37 Downloads
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Genres:
Other - Miscellaneous
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Author Comments

I need to write more songs like this...

HERE ARE SOME LYRICS!!!
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I'm a dead lion
with the fleas and the flies
biting and taking the meat from the bones at my side

I'm a dead rhino
On my back in the sun
Absorbing the heat as I rot in the stench of my dung

So won't you please
Eat my carcass and leave
Eat away my raw meat
I've got better things to do when I'm dead
So go ahead
Go ahead and indulge
The heart is good for your soul
Just don't make a mess of my head

I'm a dead Zebra
Black, white, red in the grass
I'm only a babe but we all live a live that won't last

I'm a dead snake
Resting on a bank
With the families I've grieved safe from my cold cold fangs

So won't you please
Eat my carcass and leave
Eat away my raw meat
I've got better things to do when I'm dead
So go ahead
Go ahead and indulge
The heart is good for your soul
Just don't make a mess of my head

I'm a dead lion
with the fleas and the flies
biting and taking the meat from the bones at my side.
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Thanks for listening! :D

Reviews


AdventureBiscuitAdventureBiscuit

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Excellent!

I really like the vocals. I like that they're not perfect. It suits the style of the song. Plis, a song about African animal corpses doesn't need pitch-perfect vocals anyway :D

The lyrics made me laugh. Some of them are so silly, but some are very clever, and they all work beautifully in the context of the song and melody.

But I think that this song is very flat in terms of dynamics (which isn't neccesarily bad). It's just that the guitar doesnt change much at all. It does suit the song, but adding bass and simple percussion as the song goes on might make it more interesting to listen to and continue listening to. Shaker, bass drum and sidestick (and perhaps progressively to a normal snare strike) would make a nice comination, methinks.

But you've done VEERYY well. I really like this song. Keep it up bro!


warefish responds:

Cheers dude! I'm really glad you like it. :D

Most of the songs I post up here are rough demos. So the tips are always greatly apreciated!!

Thanks muchly!!

-Fish


Elise-LucyElise-Lucy

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Needs polishment

I believe, this song realy has chances to become good, but it's potential is a little wasted in this version... I like the guitar play (expecially in the beginning). Nonetheless, I feel, it lacks something, though it's hard to point out what. Also, the vocals could be better in the chorus. But I really like the lyrics! They are quite funny. Plus for this.


warefish responds:

Reckon an additional snare drum and uke will work? I had some friends opt to re-record this with me. :P