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Date
02/11/2010
File Info
Song
4.1 MB
4 min 27 sec
Score
4.23 / 5.00

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Genres:
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Author Comments

Well this is a song that i'm working on to enter in the "Compition: Drum and Piano (cash)" thread contest thingy. But i needs some fresh ears to hear what i've got so far.

There are some notes in here that are held out longer that what they probably should, but i felt like it added to the tension. Also there are a lot of offbeat sounding parts, but i've tried to keep them at least mostly in beat.

This was all made in the demo of Fl studio 9.
So yeah enjoy and help me out =3

Edit:
I changed it up a bit, i switched out that synth pad with an organ sound =3

Edit:
Okay so i did a bit of work on the eq this time around, and i think i've just about got it. I also changed a few parts up a bit, added a bit to a couple of the transitions. Hopefully things sound better now, though i know it still will need some evening out work. =3

Edit 3/30/2010:
Alrighty, there's probably a lot more i could do with this, but i think it's done for now, i'm having issues with the eq and trying to make it louder without any weirdness. But anywasy, hope i don't suck too badly =P

Reviews


jaysummers759885jaysummers759885

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars February 27, 2010

Hmmmm...

The sound is very ethereal, which I like. I noticed that the phrasing in the composition could have moved a lot quicker between each other. Being a pianist I have always thought that the piano by itself, naked, and bare, shows the true beauty of the instrument. The drums in this piece are very interesting, especially since there are some slurs that are off time, but I think this piece would do well without the drums at all.

In my opinion, it needs a solid phrase to glue it all together. This piece sounds like very good accompaniment. (without the drums)

I myself am a fan of off beats, and different time signatures. What I did notice is that the slurs that you are using are simply pulling the notes a 264th note into the next measure on occasion, which by itself is interesting, but the drums don't sound like they can keep up with that composition.

I wish you all the best, and you can always count on me for an honest review.
I really like the sound of this one, I would agree that it needs a lot of brushing up.

~J


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Kirbyfemur responds:

Well, the contest was to incorporate both piano and drum as the main instruments of the song. So i was trying to follow the guidelines of the contest. I don't know what i could do to make it so the drums fit together with the piece better, but i guess i has some work to do to ze drum part, and hopefully incorporate a more defined melody. Thanks for your kind words =3


StepStep

Rated 4 / 5 stars February 13, 2010

Nice!

I knew I was going to have some good competition for the contest. This sounds really cool, keep up the good work.

Yeah, the melodies are very catchy. You're really talented when it comes to melodies, and here is no exception. The main melody is catchy, and when the beat comes in, I was like 'wow, those match perfectly'. Also, towards the end, the song really picked up, and was really fun to listen to.

Unfortunately, I don't agree with a lot of the 'notes that are held out longer than what they probably should' in this. They feel as if they're 'forced' into playing for longer than they should be, instead of having that 'natural' held back feel, if you know what I mean, and at times the piano lingered behind the beat which was a little weird. I'd suggest making some parts where the piano plays some high notes on its own, and THEN adding some notes which are longer than they should be, since those notes sound weird when played with the beat, making the listener lose track of the song.

Still, on the bright side, the offbeat notes were fun to listen to, and the chords you used are really well done. By the way, I'll have to agree with RiotProof that this song needs some EQing. By the way, the synth (?) that you added sounded a bit weird, and sort of ruined the feel you originally set with the piano. Replace it with some strings, or possibly a woodwind instrument such as a pan flute.

The transitions overall were decent, even though there were a few transitions which made me lose the song's rhythm. Also, the transition at 3:13 doesn't sit well with me, I think maybe it's because you took away the piano and drums a bit too suddenly. Still, a lot of the other transitions were cool, such as the way you introduced the piano and beat at 3:30. The song structure is very good - perhaps at times a little random, but a good song structure in general.The intro was great, I can't find anything to complain about, and so was the ending, so great job ^^.

The drums had good samples, and the beats were very cool, and fit extremely well with the piano. The drums in general were well varied. The only thing I would ask for would be some more cymbals. You mostly had tomtom drums, a kick and a snare. Some parts in the song could do with some ride cymbals and maybe some hihats, and I think this definitely needs some crash cymbals too, namely when you took away the drums from the song, since most of the time they exited from the song quite abruptly and suddenly, so by adding a crash cymbal right after they exit the song, I think it would provide a smoother exit.

Overall, this is a really cools submission, and Darklight and I sure have to work if we want to beat this :P. Keep up the great work, you're an excellent piano artist, and you have quite a large chance of being $50 richer towards mid-April xP. Keep it up! Also, I'd appreciate it if you check out my latest WiP, I'm about to post it on the WiP advice thread ;).
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Kirbyfemur responds:

A lot of those extra held out note where by accident, and where mostly me just being lazy and not wanting to fix it, but it ended up making it hard to put the beats and melodys/harmonies together lol I'll try to fix some of the more forced sounds here and there. Though luckily we have a few months to work on this. The Synth i used was mainly because i like that sound, and it was just an easy go to for me, i'll figure out a better sound for that part. As far as the drums go, i'll try to add more toms and other cymbols, but my main problem its the evenness when i do, i'll figure it out those. Thanks for your rather kind words and good luck to you as well sir, i'll be looking forward to yours and the other's sumbissions =3


RiotProofRiotProof

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars February 11, 2010

Not bad at all!

I actually enjoyed the off beat and in the piano, is pretty amazing actually. It makes your piece more original. I've been working with FL for about 3yrs now and i think you did an awesome job. Sounds like it may need to be EQed out in the master track a little bit, but thats all.


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Kirbyfemur responds:

Hey thanks man!

The eq thing will hopefully be fixed by the time i finish the song, though I am still an amateur when it comes to mastering. Thanks for your kind words though =3